Humanity - Comments

Okay I've rewrote this like ten times. I'm at loss for words. This could quite possibly be my new favourite story. :D The way you write is so refreshing. I love the way you ended the chapter with Society killed me... because it leaves me with the question: did she actually kill herself? But then she said she didn't, so. THERE'S JUST SO MANY POSSIBILITIES.

MORE. I NEED MORE. I can't say that I've wanted to know what happens next in a story this bad, in quite a long time. I'm subscribing. <33 Fantastic start!

While I was reading the first chapter, I was sort of confused how the girl was writing this while she was dead, but then the thought that she wrote this all before she was murdered came to me. Man, I am so silly. But I find it interesting that she is recording all this on her laptop and how she says that she didn’t kill herself. It just makes me wonder what happened to led up to her death.

I also like, how in the first chapter, the tone in the beginning feels a little sarcastic but then it switches to a more serious tone. It just gives me that feeling that a teenager is writing it because they can change their tones very quickly. Anyway, enough of my rambling. I think this is a really good start to this story. Good job and good luck with the rest of the story!

The banner and layout are gorgeous. They make it seem like a very innocent, cutesy story. Kind of ironic, but definitely suiting. Just reading the summary, it made me think of that movie preview where there's an adorable little girl but she says, "Everyone who lives in this house gets killed." Very disturbing but amazing that you could portray something like that in a simple summary.

I love how the first chapter gives the main character a certain joyfulness. Like, she's joking around, but has a very dark background to her. The way you said how the killer has many names was definitely different and unique.

Basically, I adore this story so far and I'm definitely subscribing. :)

It seriously like, gave me shivers. From the moment I read the summary thing.

Ooh, I definitely like the sound of this. It reminds me of The Lovely Bones a little bit. Oh, and the layout is lovely as well (: Anyways, moving on to the review!

I really like how you started this off. You really give off this personal vibe, as it seems like Julie is talking to the audience. For some reason, I'm eager to find out what her password was, haha; however, I'm even more eager to find out how she knew she was going to be killed. And I love how you mentioned that "society" killed her. It rings true to most deaths these days, it seems :/

What a lovely - but sad - start to this story! Amazing job <3

Okay, just thought I'd share before I get to the part where I tell you how much potential your story has, I'm listening to The Man Who Can't Be Moved - The Script and it rocks! (And I don't usually listen to this kind of music... It's like I've been lied to my entire life!)

Anyway. This story has potential. And not the kind that your math teacher tells you about right after you fail a big test because you haven't studied at all the entire chapter. You need to update because I'm subscribing.

:P

Okay, wow. That was good. That was good. I never subscribe to stories but I love this so much that... yeah, I'm subbing.

The summary is brilliant. It drew me in right away, and the chapter was great too! lol I wonder what her password was XD

I love this concept too. And I want to read more, please update soon!

Hey, I really like the start of this! It's very mysterious and it has a chain-y sort of feel to it at the end. The whole "my killer goes by many names" thing? Very neat. I don't think the layout really matches the darkness of the plot but maybe you're going for contrast, which is TOTALLY fine.

I'm sort of eager to know how she knew she was gonna be killed because she couldn't have written this after her death, you know? So maybe something is like, leading up to her death and she's writing about it as a memoir or clues or whatever.

I like it so far, no messups as far as I can tell! :D

Ooooooooooooooh! Rosie got a good story! I mean this sounds really good,and I kinda laughed at this. It's very interesting, and the way you wrote it is purely amazing.

Wow, that was amazing intro! You've got me hooked already (:

Aaaaahhhhh!!! (that was a scream, FYI)
I LOVEEEE this! I'm clicking subscribe

Whoa. The banner is cute. Not sure how it'll fit into the story yet, but I'm sticking around to find out.

The summary was wow. I was interested<3

I loved the first chapter. I like your writing style. I don't typically read murder stories. I like this though. You just found yourself another subscriber<3

It's definitely an interesting idea. You've got a great start because if leaves readers with questions. Well it leaves me with many questions anyway. (:

I like the sound of this. You've gotten me hooked already! It has a lot of promise, and I'm excited :D