Breathtaking Nightmare - Comments

It was a pure ride, the fear in the words atthe beginning caught me, I hadto continue. And the transition was really unexpected when it went from choking to drowning. I gotta say great job there. Then it moved in really slow and sweet with the passion that griped my attention, both points of view were very nice and you not being a guy, you did very well to nail the feeling and thoughts. Sexy, Scary, and one I had a good time reading. I think if you continued this, I would like to see why he died (her ex) and more fear and desperation. :) Thanks for the story

I really love how the plot kept me in suspense!(: This story was wonderful, ugh. I was cutting my teeth from the nerves that maybe it wasn't a dream, and that Roy really was after her and that he wasn't dead. ::shiver: Brownie points for that, definitely. Great one-shot, I loved every bit of it!

About the nightmare...Maya went through a lot while she was with Roy, everyone gets that and even though he is dead he still haunts her. She can't forget all the things he did to her and that's why she has those breath-taking nightmares. In her nightmare Ryan thinks she is crazy and calls a doctor... That's what she fears the most now, for Ryan to think she is crazy and leave her as well as to never forget Roy.

About the part where Ryan's heart sinks and he can’t breathe is because he has his own breath-taking nightmares. Of course you don't know since it's not written anywhere in the one-shot but some things are better staying hidden for mystery to work. Like that, you were all wondering: Why did Ryan felt so sensitive at that time like a girl would?

Also guys don't always act like men when they are with their girlfriends, they show their soft side to their girlfriends even if the relationship lasts for one year or till they get bored or whatever.

If you have more questions I would be glad to answer them. <3

Alright so the nightmare was random... I mean I get why it was there hut I still felt it was unneeded. Now this one is fine because you don't understand the extent of their relationship but you always have to be careful not to make a guy sound like a girl. I mean since you're a girl they will always have a slightly femminie touch but nothing you can do about that but make sure they are manly and like dudes in other stories I mean this worked fine cause as I said you dont know what the two went through together, but sometime it just won't work. I must say it was good though because you felt their love for one another it wasn't just another good time with your girlfriend it was pure love good job

Wow, just Wow, that was amazing.
Such a gripping storyline!
Really should continue this!

HOLY FUCKING SHITBAG
O-O
I LOVED IT
it made my heart go ding
I was terrified at first...
I'm not used to you writing horror.
So happy they had sex -.-
I'd wish you continue this but oh well
: /
I loved it either way.

I believe that there has never been a writer before you who can make me like their stories so much. You are such an inspiration. And I love how much meaning this one-shot has. It's going to haunt me with its beauty and emotion. I love how you can capture everything into words.

Whoa, that was quite the story I just read. I liked the story line and the suspense with the Roy situation. Very good stuff as always