I like how this story differs from the others I've read in that you actually convey Oli's character realistically, but you're a great author so that needs not saying. (: More soon please! x
This is THE most SEXY fanfiction I have ever read. Hands down. This makes me want Oli even MORE in my pants XD I love every bit of this fanfiction :D More soon please!
Hey, you're a great writer. You slip into present from past tense really smoothly, usually when people on mibba do that I get a little confused. Also, your communication is really good, there's a visible contrast when you switch from the narator's language to the slang the characters speak. Keep it up, I'm subscribing. ^-^
More soon please!
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