This was a very well written story, but it isn't something I would read just to read. You have very good grammar and excellent spelling, and your writing flows rather well. I am really interested about what rumor could go around about Natalies little sister, and I also want to know just what Virgin Camp is, so you do a very good job at telling just enough, but keeping the reader wanting to know what is going to happen next. Good Job.
Loved the update! :D Ooh... for a moment there I thought something was going to happen between Ryan and Damon. Like, when he held her back after the group... 'session'. Nothing happened, though. :/ Kind of a bummer. lol. I really loved Ryan's backlash in this one, though. It was pretty humorous. And I'm glad she came up with some comebacks against Jennifer instead of letting her just own the conversation. The ending was kind of a little off to me. Idk why, though. Maybe it's because Natalie asked Ryan, 'Oh, you have a key now?', and then Ryan just said, 'Jennifer Fitzgerald'. Maybe just add a yes before that and I think it would sound better. Or change it to, 'Yes. The key is Jennifer Fitzgerald', or something along that line. You know what I mean, though, right? With the answer being kind of weird with just Ryan stating the girl's name? It's just a thought; it might just be me who thought it was a little off. But great update, though, overall! :D Can't wait for more! :D
Correct me if I'm wrong, but I thought that being the Barakat to your Gaskarth implied we were best friends already.
Blair and Chuck are totally my favorite shipping. I really miss Taylor Momsen though. Too bad she had to get herself kicked off the show. >_> Though she's probably happier being a lead singer now anyways....I haven't watched since like... the end of season one, but we had to watch this promo clip for it during Art in Pop Culture and now I want to watch it all~ [[even if it is degrading and stereotypical and blahblahblah]]
YAY.(: Oh my gosh, I love Damon and Ryan. They're so funny. And Ryan is totally jealous of Jennifer. He needs to slay her because they both need it. Please update soon.(: This is great.
this is the hardest I've ever rejoiced in my life, oh my god. ASKLDJFAJDFHLAKJWHELFKAJSD I'M SO EXCITED. please update soon c: IT'S YOUR TURN, I WANNA MARRY ANNA.
So I was kind of checking to see if this was updated and I reread the title of the last chapter and it got me thinking. If there's "No unsupervised humping" does that mean all humping has to be supervised? Who supervises this? Is it like, some creepy old camp director? *wince* overthinking is never a good thing.
I think I should go to Virgin Camp. I mean, everything thinks I'm not a virgin because I use super jumbo tampons. But I can't help it if I have a heavy flow and a wide-set vagina. I need love, too!
I want more of this. I need more of Nat and Ryan and Owen and Damon. This is quite literally one of the funniest things I've read on Mibba. You guys rock.
I'm 2/3 of the way done with this and oh my god. It's so funny and clever and you guys are just wonderful. I want to go to virgin camp just to see the hot Virgin Slayers mmm.
I really like the characters. Both Ryan and Natalie are portrayed really well. And their slayers sound fabulously yummy. I hope they knock them down a few pegs though.
If the picture doesn't work I'll repost it as a plain ole link. Anyways. There are so many possibilities for this story and you always seem to outdo all of my predictions, so I'll leave you alone (hopefully with your Mean Girls reference).
I love this story, it's absolutely brilliant. Such a good idea and I can't wait to see what happens in the end, whatever it is though it'll definitely be worth the wait.
Loved the update! I don't believe I commented after the last update. :/ Sorry about that. But, I loved both of the most recent updates. I love how Ryan and Nat joined in an alliance. Yay! And I honestly don't know what's going to happen, but I hope they can hold through with their promise. It will be awesome if they do. It'll teach the camp that they can't just... say when people can lose their viriginity. XD That should be a personal thing for each person, not a whole group of people's business. :/ Those whities kind of remind me of Regina's mom in Mean Girls:
And they're kind of creeping like Tina Fey did to Amy Poehler at the Golden Globes:
XD No? :P Anyway, great job with the updates! :D Can't wait for more! :D
Somebody wrote in that book that I'm lying about being a virgin because I use super jumbo tampons, but I can't help it if I have a heavy flow and a wideset vagina!
God that gets me every time. And I like the whole Nat-Ryan team thingy. Yay :)