How to Melt Ice - Comments

Omg hahahaha

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The first thing I would like to comment on is the fact that the story starts off with restating the fact that is in indeed the first chapter, named First Encounter. I believe the chapter title says all, no need to furthermore let it be known.
Second of all, it starts off as Jonathans POV that shouldn't be the case, and for the record it's "Jonathan's" with an apostrophe showing possession.
The first chapter shouldn't have started off with whose point of view it is in because, first of all we don't even know who Jonathon is, is he the main character?
Also there are a bit of grammatical errors that can easily be fixed by proof reading.

Overall, you have a good plot, so far (only on chapter two) so keep it going, and slow down enough to reread everything you write before posting so you can fix any errors, or have someone else proof read.

What could Jessica possibly want after all she had put Jon through? But yes I do feel drama coming again.

It is good that Casper is starting to warm to Jon, but I am sure, for a child, Kaner is a tough act to follow.

Wonderful update. Sounds like drama ahead

Loved the update!!! WOnder what's going to happen next!

Chapter 98 was intense! Great job!

Part of me was thinking that after 5.3 you were ending the story - not that I wanted it to be over ...it just seemed that the roller coaster ride had ended.

But with this chapter, it seems like you are starting that climb back up that hill again, opening new cans of worms along the way. And I can wait for the "date" chapter - it should be epic!

Well, I am strapped in again waiting to see where your ride will take me. But as always, I know it will be a very entertaining journey!!

Yea they are finally going on their date. All seems to be going well just waiting for something to happen. Another awesome update.

Shipping Kaner till the end!!!

I think Casper is adorable. He really loves Charlie and does not want to see her hurt. It is too bad that he has had so much upheaval in his young life. Kids see far more than we think they do.

It may take Casper some time to warm up to Jon, but I think that is normal. Casper is being protective but also a little jealous.

And I am very interested in what Vik is hiding.

LOL! Victor is hiding something! Great story!

This story is awesome. Unlike other people, I liked Charlie and Kane! Not their first encounter, but Sweden and when they got home. It was cute :) How long is this going to be?

Love the update. So sweet. Its too cute how everyone is so protective of Charlie. Hope they get a happy ending.

This chapter was so undeniably sweet - it makes you believe that true love does conquer all. Charlie is Jon's lobster - she belongs with him for good. I am sure Andree agrees!

But I almost feel like a dog that has been beaten. I want to believe soooo bad that love is real, but part of me is cringing, waiting for the next strike!

Ha! Ha! cute update. So sad Charlie lost her baby. I love that they are together again.

What is it with Kaner and girls in the backseat of limos??

What is it with Kaner and girls in the backseat of limos??

Yea! I like Charlie with Jon! Poor Kaner he kind of deserved it for not telling Jon the truth! Awesome update.

MUCH BETTER.... I love it... though I was pretty shocked to find out that you were leading us on all the time... WOW haha

Charlie and Kane??? That is just so wrong! She is really settling and it is a terrible decision! Charlie and Jonny is the only way this can end!