Alexithymia - Comments

Honestly woman, this story is amazing and I think your word choice is lovely and like I said, I forgive your spelling errors, if people want to complain about it, they can go do something very unpleasant. I love this story so much, please update soon!

Hi there, love the story! I love it so much that I ignore your spelling errors, which is saying a lot, I am a huge stickler for grammar and spelling. So yeah, love the story, love the names and the looks of the characters:) keep on writing, please

So, I think you need to proofread, little sister. I found quite a few spelling mistakes ;P
And you maybe use the word beautiful too much. Do you need a thesauraus?
But overall, I like he chapter. It got a little confusing in spots and I think you need to be more conscious of that. I know it makes sense in your head, but that's the problem. We don't all live in Tiffy land. But yeah, Elijah is a creeper and Emery is adorable. I dunno if you can get any better. Lea and Mason are, what? Dating? Since when did that happen??

Okay, this chapter was kind of confusing just because i didn't realize you were overlaying untason yelled for Emery to go with Elijah.
And the reason I keep getting them confused is because their first names start with the same fucking letter! For fucks sake! So what did Leif mean when he said emery is like a bug kn his windshield? That seemed harsh. And dude, that entire conversation with Leif kinda confused me. I get that their friends but the way you're portaging it is that it's more of an obligatory friendship. Like, Leif is Emery's big brother or something. I'm not sure I like that. It's not very endearing but hey, if that's what you were going for... Great.

*you're
*college (2nd one)
*cat
*much

Yeah, combination of automatic spellcheck and sleep deprivation.

I really like this chapter! My only thing is maybe explain some things a bit more? Like, the conversation with Jackie confused me a little but other than that yore golden.
Except you said collage (a collection of pictures) instead of collage (like, university). But that's okay. Easy mistake.
Anywhoo. You should post character pictures. I know you have them. I just don't feel like going back through the chapters to find them....yeah, I'm lazy. Get over it...

Now, to the chapter. ELIJAH IS SUCH A VAT PERSON. I can see so Mich of you in him, honestly. It's your gay male personality coming out. Hah. Get it? Coming out? Why am I so funny? Anyway, I like how he can do hair and how the ex is so painfully ghetto. It's really just amusing. I can't remember names so that's what you get (I blame lack of character pictures!) That little girl sounds amazing. I don't want a girl when/if I have kids but if I end up with one I want it to be her. Emery's friend is pretty humorous too. I see a Mason/(whatever the fuck her name is) romance coming on? And why the hell was Emery yelling? It made be laugh but holy shit. Nervous much? Haa.

ok update please i love this can't wait for more =)

*sister

Yeah, I definitely got the heights thing and the Nina thing, don't worry. I love Leif. He's a cool guy, I think. But what happened to Emery's hands!? Did you put that in a different chapter or...? I just don't know. It makes me sad though. I don't like when good people/characters are unhappy. And what. The hell is with him always trying to please his sited? He's not fucking Cinderella. That just posses me off. I swear to fuck.

I don't mean to be nit picky here but you really REALLY need to consider the way you word things. It's confusing and sometimes boring or dry. I'm not trying to be rude, it's really like that. I like your stories and everything but definitely try to be more conscience of that.
Anywhoo! Elijah is gonna be a crazy cat person! How many cats does he have?! I counted at least three! I do understand the hindrance of a cute cat though...
So...that guy he saw... It was Emery, right?
I'm just gonna pretend it was :)

God damn. Your writing stile is amazing and infuriating and fuck you. It's really intense. It can be overwhelming and slightly confusing at times so try to watch out for that. What makes sense to you probably won't make sense to everyone else. You're kind of insane. Just saying.
Anywhoo, I want to murder some select characters in this story already. Chapter four and you've got me on a homicidal rampage already. You know, Dasie is already a bitch. He's like fucking Cinderella. I absolutely hate this. I just wanted to hug him the entire time :(
This better not drag on forever. I want him happy now.

I hate you too bitch. If I'm the only commener I'd better get a gucking shout out.
You may want to proof read again because I caught alot few things.
The most entertaining being 'collage' instead of 'college'.

TOFFANY THAT GIY EVEN KINDA LOOKS LIKE LEIF. What even??
Okay, I I finally got around to commenting and reading and thisis gonna be short cause I'm sleepy.
I love this chapter so much. Emery is already my favorite.
Like, the first chapter just sucks compared to this one.