Liam Sabbers, Professional Boyfriend - Comments

Normally I don't read stuff like this but I'm intrested in this so I'm subscribing!

I love this idea. Like, a lot. Probably too much.

IT'S WHAT I'VE NEEDED ALL MY LIFE. PLEASE TELL ME THIS STORY IS TRUE.

But really, this seems really good, realistic enough to work/be relatable and yet unique enough to generate interest. Nice job!

So I totes just finished reading the introduction. LOL I WANT LIAM TO BE MY PRO BROFRIEND. He sounds adorable, too. Anyway, I just really liked this entire idea and you didn't fail me with the intro. It was faabulous! You have such different, unique names, too. Jonah sounds like a total gorilla juice head tool. I thought it was cute how she was blushing when they were talking about going to prom together. :'D UPDATE SOON RAHN. <3

Oh my gosh.
This story is brilliant! I love the whole concept, it's amazing. Liam seems to be a very nice guy, I just hope that he doesn't get into a problem if one girl actually thinks that they are "dating" for real or seduces him. You know what I mean? That would be funny, but I hope it doens't happen to him because he is a very nice guy. I feel sorry for Sunny, if the the guy cancells twice ... she should dump him, he isn't worth the time. :)
Great story!! :D I can't wait to read the first chapter on November first!! XD

I love how this began. It makes it so much more unique and well developed when it starts with Liam hanging out with his best friend rather than being all suave and arrogant like I was expecting. I love how the professional boyfriend thing started out as a joke and that you added all kinds of details that you can build on later, like with the junior prom and his best friend's relationship.

The only problem I have is that the summary seems kind of disconnected from the rest of the story. I liked the Liam from the first chapter, but he seemed like a different person than the one in the summary.

I didn't notice any spelling or grammar mistakes and I really like your layout. I'm really excited to see what's next.

Having read both the summary and the chapter you have up for this, I have to say that the chapter is much better than the summary. That is both a good thing, and a problem. It's a good thing because writing chapters is harder and more time-consuming. It's a problem because the summary is the first thing people will see, and might be how they decided whether or not to actually read the chapter.

Here, I don't think it's an issue of you not having enough of a summary (that isn't always problematic anyway), but it's more just that there are errors in your summary, and it doesn't flow as well as the chapter. You need a comma after, 'Hello', for example. Good-looking is hyphenated. The fact that you introduce prices and stuff in the summary also makes it seem really unrealistic- who would actually pay $15 an hour for that? I suppose it's written from the character's perspective, and maybe he's just being cocky, but I don't know... the summary seems cheesy.

Your actual chapter, however, is great. You deal with the subtle ways the characters come to their decisions, and I think the scene is set in a very realistic manner. I didn't have to suspend my disbelief here. Rather, it just comes off as light and fun. Your writing style is also great- neither too dense nor too lacking in description.

It'll be interesting to see where you go with this.

Good luck finishing it!

First off I love all of your stories and this one is no exception. I love the layout and the banner and the idea is very interesting- though I could tell he's in love with his female bestfriend. Sorry, but that was cliché and predictable. Other than that, I loved it all! I couldn't find any mistakes, though you might want to rephrase Sunny's shrill cell phone ring tone. To me, it's a lot for my tongue and thoughts to go over. It's just my opinion, so yeah, don't take it personally. Other than that-

I Luff It.

I just finished the summary.

SUB. SCRIBING.

oh my. I'm smiling nonstop right now. Alright, one) very pretty layout! I love the picture. It's easy on th eyes too, none of that bright neon flashy sh*t. Two) this is such an original plot. I haven't seen anything like this!! Makes me look forward to every chapter. Three) The summary is GUARENTEED to pull people in. It's very blunt and to the point, but it's witty and funny. AWESOME job.

Off to first chapter!!

Alright. What's this bull about not posting first chapter until November?

NO. I CAN'T WAIT THAT LONG.

This story, I can tell, is something I am going to enjoy. And the fact that he has glasses makes me squeal because I have THE biggest glasses fetish in the world. Oh my. GOODGOD.

I love it so far. You've got a great balance between giving out details and letting the readers mind roam. I tend to over inspect everything and such. Your writing also has a good flow to it! I didn't see any mistakes, but don't take my word for it. When I like a story I completely ignore any mistakes hahaha.

UPDATE SOON. SOON. SOON.

Kay? Kay, cool.

This sounds really amazing. I can't wait for you to update and to see how it turns out, because i already have an idea in my head and I wanna know if i'm right or wrong. Either way i'm reaing this story all the way to the end.

And so it begins! I can't wait to see where you go with this. There are just so many possibilities. (:

This first chapter is bloody amazing!
I love how casual it is and how Sonny gives him the idea!
It's fucking brilliant!

This is actually a really good idea! I love how the first chapter went along. & I love how they have a tumblr. There are a few glitches on it, so let me know if you need help fixing it. Now if only I can find an actual professional boyfriend to come with me to homecoming!

Now this is a story I'm willing to read (:

Oh! I've heard you whoring this about and I was going to check it out eventually. I think this is just such a great idea. The layout is pretty. haha not must else to say about it. The colors go well together? Yes. A blind person could see that. The banner is beyond cute.

Is this for real? Because I think I would like to hire Liam Sabbers. Full time. 24/7.

I think this is going to be a great read. Just by the way you've written the summary. Professional boyfriend? YES. Prices may vary? Oh, how so? I just love how formal this is, when it's about something totally ridiculous. ;D "I don't bite...unless you want me to." DEAD.

I AM SUBSCRIBING. :'D

I'm glad I stumbled upon this through forum-surfing! Just from the summary, you've drawn me in. I've never read a story like this before and I'm eager to see what happens. :3

This story sounds wicked, no lie. xD
I'm so excited, I've already subscribed. I love the idea of a fake boyfriend, especially if you just want one to want one. You can't feign true affection, but it'll be great to watch it all unfurl. Such a wonderful plot, I can't wait to see how you can add some flair to turn it into something truly original.

Stumbled upon this in a journal of yours. I had no intentions of actually commenting on it, but you needed voters for the character names.

Anyways, this sounds totally awesome. & I am subbing. Kay bye!

Xxoo.

This sounds really interesting. =D I mean who hasn't wanted to buy a boy to be sweet to them every once in a while? Like this is utterly lovely and can't wait for you to start this!

LOL, this looks awesome. xD
Subbing. <333

Even though you hate writing in first person, you did really well! I like this and I'm subscribed. c: