Dancing in the rain. - Comments

love it! im expecting an update soon :P

I loveeee your story ! Hurry and update please ! You could add a little more action in the chapters thouqh , but great !

i love the story danceing in the rain it is awesome i hope you continue with this story

Very detailed and well written(:

i liked it :)

It was really good :) I can't wait to hear the rest of it :)

i loved it(: write soon please!

cannot wait for the next chapter love it and i was like what the heck she got knife in her bra....she is wickedly awesome i wanna do that :) lol keep at it...you are a great writer :)

Great, much better :) looking forward to chapter 2!

thanks :) basically the bit i noticed the most was where the house is decribed. You made a sudden switch from past tense to present tense and i understand why, but is does feel a little bit weird to read for me personally. Get a second opinion though cos other might like it :)

really nice story, I'm intrigued :) agreed with one of the other comments though that sometimes the tensing is a little off but nothing a little tweak wont fix :)

1. Haa, cute little brothers!
2. This chick is pretty badass to have a knife in her bra
3. Golly gee,.sexual tension!

So the story is really entertaining. Just watch your tenses because you tend to switch between past and present often and it made it kind of hard to follow.

By all means, post more. Im curious as to what happens next

I like it your story the fact that it has to be in the rain and the setting is in the street while its raining. (plus i love the rain)

Great beginning to the story. It's amazing.

OMB! I love this story, April!!! U r like a super awesome writer! This is really exciting, too! I can't wait for more and Gosh, i wish i could write like this!!!!

it is really good. keep writing ^_^.

nice! :}

This is very well written. but instead of using (Brackets) you should simply use, two commers, this is the correct way.

I hoe you end up finishing this, because you obviously put work into using your words.