24 Hours - Comments

Here from comment swap!

I love this idea, and I like how relatable the characters are. This was very readable, and I enjoyed seeing just enough detail and description to make these stories very special. I'm so excited to see what other stories come forward in this! So glad I was brought to this story! Keep up the good work!

Here from comment swap.
So first the layout is pretty cute. Easy to read too.
I like how they're all little stories, that's a really cool idea. You have a nice style or writing, plenty of detail and description, but still not overwhelming. Your characters are all really likeable and I feel as if I can relate to them. I'd like to see more of these, they were really good.

These are such amazing stories; you've gone above and beyond in detail and passion. They are so well written and you can feel the emotion from each character and I love how you've used different experiences for each character! I don't believe anyone has thought of this- I love how you've not only used relationships between couples but also friends as well. It makes it all the more special. It's such an excellent idea! I hope you continue and keep this updated! It's absolutely perfect. I wouldn't change anything unless you wrote more for each story, but they are again perfect the way they are. Amazing job! Please continue!

I'm reading on. (;

And I was already crying because there were no apples left and I was lonely. This line really stood out to me, and I wanted to comment and say so. It's from Georgia's chapter and it just sounded so right, I loved it. And the chapter took me by surprise because I thought it was gonna be happy and then she broke up with him. I definitely do like this a lot. Subbing!

This is honestly the first good piece of work I have found on here through the comment swap, seriously. I only read the first chapter but you've got really nice description, not too little, not too much. I've got a great feel of who your characters are and I can picture most everything perfectly. I'd say you had a fantastic start to a story if I didn't know that each chapter featured someone different! But seriously, this was great. I loved Callie's cliche timidness, I liked Tom's mysterious, bold attitude, I liked how relatable the characters are and how easy this was to understand. I also enjoyed the ending - it's what every reader would want to see, the character finally breaking free and enjoying life! I definitely loved this. I think I'll read on.

First I got to say that I love the simple layout, especially the banner picture.

Now with your story,
I love the story title, and I love the concept that you are doing. This kind of reminds of that old tv show: 24.
Just adore how you use the chapter names as the hours and the person who it's about, makes it much easier to follow. So far, I haven't read anything much like this and it seems you have talent.

Well done

Dear author, that was a great. First of all, I liked the the story's title. It was simple but interesting no less. You did a great job with the summary and your idea of naming eaching chapter with a name and the hours was excellent. I have never read anything like that before. You have talent and that shows in your descriptions. Well done. XD ~Marian.

Dear author, that was a great. First of all, I liked the the story's title. It was simple but interesting no less. You did a great job with the summary and your idea of naming eaching chapter with a name and the hours was excellent. I have never read anything like that before. You have talent and that shows in your descriptions. Well done. XD ~Marian.

I've finally read every chapter you have up so far. I'd forgotten about this story for a while, but I'm so glad I rediscovered it! Your writing style is so beautiful and complex, yet simple at the same time. I've laughed and cried and grinned like a sappy fool, and I can't wait to do more of that. Bring on the next chapter!

This is wonderful. Every story is written beautifully and recaptures the reader each time. Like many of the other commentors have mentioned, your idea on how to set-up your stories is fantastic. I love the description on the first page about each hour being a story..its simple yet perfect. I can also picture the final product if this were to be published. The imagery you create helps to progress each story and you do it it extremely well. Each character is unique, relate-able and most importantly real. I can especially relate to Callie's situation (lol). I like how not every story has a picture perfect ending, some of them even made me cry, but I like that all of the stories are believable. I had to laugh about the bacon XD I can see a conversation like that taking place.

Anyway, this is wonderful and can't wait to read more~ keep it up ^^

Comment swap~

I remember skimming over some fanfiction story that had the same name, so I was thinking this was it. oops.
Anyways, in all seriousness, these are amazing cute little stories. I love how perfectly you end every chapter and it's not a cliffhanger, which I'm guilty of doing, haha.
But these are great, you have such talent. Good job!

~Comment Swap~

Okay. When I first read the title, I thought it was some spy story. No jokes.
In all seriousness though, these stories are amazing! It's times like these when I'm absolutely glad that Dujo came up with Comment Swap!
Each and every story is perfect! I couldn't stop reading till I finished them all.
They're not too long, not too short. And it's easy for us to make up the rest of the stories. The endings aren't abrupt or cliffhangers. They're just...perfect.

-comment swap-

First of all, I love this idea. It's definitely something I've never seen before, and I absolutely adore the way you put these love stories together. The stories themselves are so sweet and heartfelt, and people can relate to at least one of them. They're not waaaaay out there like some love stories. I love it, I love it, I love it! Good job

The layout is simple yet beautiful. Well done, it really fits into the story. My favorite was Callie, Nick and Ben. /: I really hate manipulative bestfriends, but it happens a lot, but thank God Callie is going with Tom in the end hehe. As for Nick, just typical bad boys but all I pictured is a scene kid, I don't really like the look but I'm a fan of nice girl vs bad boy story thingy hehe. And for Ben, I love the end I mean, not that I want Ben to die but the last paragraph was so deep I love how you chose the sentences.

I presume you'll continue the story until it reachs 23.00 - 00.00 right? :D

Such a cute beautiful compilation of love stories :3

Well, wow. Well done!

First, I like the layout, though I do wish the red background were just the tiniest bit darker, as so to match the heart in the photo. Otherwise, I really do love your layout and how simple it is.

As for the story, I like the idea. It's really cute and the couples make me smile. If anything, I kept looking for commas that weren't there. I don't know if that's a regional difference or just personal preference, but I wish there were more commas. Otherwise, I adore how you've set up the chapters and the characters.

Well done, and keep going! <3

So far, my favorite chapter was "Nick!" (Mind you, I've only read up to that chapter, so...) I really like the idea of this story, how they're all little short stories about falling in love. I'm not usually into this type of thing, but I really, really, really like this! As soon as I get some sleep, I'll be back for more!

I'll start off with the layout. Although I've never been a fan of simple layouts with square edges and the picture connecting to the story, I actually like how it matches our story. I've seen many layouts in the Comment Swap that do not do their own justice with their layouts, but yours does. The picture matches the story perfectly and so do the colors.

The story itself is actually very interesting. I like how you move from point of view. I am a huge fan of romance, and you interpreted each characters' feelings exceptionally well. You have a great way with detail and description and the interaction is very beautiful as well. I really liked it.

Don’t care much for the Hannah character, considering there are so many women out there who act like this--and she reminds me a LOT of my ex-best friend, I think that‘s the main reason I don‘t care much for her lol. I can relate to these two. I like where this story is going, taking different spectives point of view and adding it. That is a really neat concept. Tom really knows how to start a conversation - very straight forward. I love the interaction between the two. And Jeremy and Alice are cute to, with him dreaming about her. All in all what I’ve read so far is so amazingly well done. Your descriptions and character interactions are all done so well. Honestly, excellent writing keep it up!

First of all, this layout is stunning. Simple and yet beautiful – it’s exactly what I look for and hope for with my own layouts. Secondly, the concept is great, kind of a Love Actually thing but over a 24 hour time period. I absolutely love how in the first chapter, Callie constantly refers to Hannah as Hannah Elizabeth Rose because it really emphasises how important she is. Like a queen or something. I noticed one mistake which was, “I think it's the only think,” you meant to put thing here, I think. The way that Callie feels she has to sneak away from Hannah to smoke is also a great thing you’ve done. It’s like she doesn’t do anything Hannah disapproves of and it shows a little bit of rebellion, showing Callie could probably break away from Hannah if she wanted too because she has some control. I don’t know why, but I kind of didn’t believe Callie at the end. I feel like maybe she’ll fall back into the pattern. Anyway, I’m going to keep reading and enjoy the rest of the story.

I really really like this. I love all the different characters and it doesnt get confusing. Your character development is fantastic. Different parts of each story are easy to relate to. I love the layout and how it isnt too overdone. This is one of the best stories I've read in a while. Great job. I look forward to more