A Faint Illusion - Comments

GODDAMMIT I NEED YOU TO CONTINUE THIS. For real. I can't even handle it anymore; this is one of my favourite stories ever!!

I am so in love with this story! Please update it soon, I'm dying!

Whoa what's going on? Are they gonna figure their shibout or keep going in this circle?

Hey im a comment swapper :) i really enjoyed your story. Ive never read a Tom Sykes one and i really loved yours. You've thought out your characters and your story works perfectly, i literally couldnt stop reading it! i have already subscribed somewhere in the process of reading it all and i literally cant say how great your story is!

Ok, so I'm generally more of an Oliver Sykes fan, but this is really good! Not too over dramatic like a lot of the stories on here, which I like!! And you are really detailed and describe everything. The layout is good and easy to read. But I do agree with Ohh Star, you seem a bit unorganized in your ideas, but that's totally an easy fix! Keep writing, this story has great potential!

The ending to chapter eight literally broke my heart then fixed it again and then my emotions just got all over the place! I really love how this is a Tom story, there's generally a lot of Tom Sykes fics but many of them are cliched and boring! So pleased to say that this one breaks the mould! Really enjoyed this :) xx

First of all, I think the layout's amazing, but the writing was a little small. Secondly, especially in your first chapter, you have a lot of one word or one sentence paragraphs and while they are good in writing, too many is a bit offputting. Other than that, I really love it!

You are quite descriptive. I like that. I am a bit confused as to what is actually going on though. I really like it though. It flows really well and you are able to keep my attention. Although randomly in your text this shows up: ”&” I don’t know if you intended for it to be, but it’s a bit distracting. Other than that I like it. Keep up the good work.

I only read the first chapter and I was kind of confused reading this. You seem to jump all over the place and I just have no idea what was going on. It's just very vague and seems unorganized. What I'm getting from what I read though, is that this Tom Sykes is someone she used to date and now she's surprised that he's on campus... I think it's a good idea for a story, you just need to work on organization and flow.

I really like this story! But, I think you need more of a summary because a lot of people will pass up a good story if it doesn't have a description. You might wanna try something simple that doesn't give away too much of the story line, because I'm always afraid of giving away too much when I write summaries.

I like the layout, it's nice and simple. Not too simple yet not too dark and fits well with the tone in the picture.

The content was a bit silly though throughout the chapters however. Some parts were in paragraphs whereas others weren't which made it look rather messy. Chapter 4 is a good example considering none of it was made into paragraphs.

However, everything else was brilliant. The few parts that made me chuckle from a dry sense of humour, the emotions. My eyes actually began watering on chapter 8 which was a first for me. :)

Oh lawd I'm gonna have a panic attack. I seriously feel Pansy's pain right now! This is do great, and it's not a shitty story. And it's not all over the place either. It's perfect! And thanks for linking my story in your authors note :) I'll return the favor!

Cannot wait for the next chapter!

....wow.. I don't even know what to say..
I mean.. Wow.

OH my GOD.

I disagree with you though.. I don't feel that the story is all over the place, but then again, I don't really get much of it, hah! But that's maybe because I don't really know what their story is.

Ughhhh these short chapters just add to the suspense! I want them to just have a battle royale. Like someone should just shove them in a room together and lock the door, and let them just scream and yell and fight until they've solved their problems.

It's worked for me in the past :D

Can't wait for the next update! Really looking forward to it!

Seriously, these two need to hash out their issues. Oh, by the way, I love this. I love the Sykes brothers, the younger one especially.

I'm actually in love with this! I hardly ever find GOOD Tom stories anymore :/

It seems like everyone's forgotten about him :(

Hm! I'd nearly forgotten about this! Tnawe, Jona!

(I'm might a tad interested, taha)

Oooh, I quite liked the rewrite!