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  • Rainisfalling

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    Okay i found this through comment swap and heres what I think:

    Okay so obviously I'm not going to correct you on like, Ouiji board stuff and things like that because obviously that stuffs made up hahah :)
    You started off with very few details and just basic writing, but you progressed to a very nice balance of storytelling stuff hahah :) also I like the rat facts after each chapter. This was a cute little story and I liked it :)
    June 17th, 2012 at 06:48am
  • noriko.

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    Okay, so :)

    I liked how you wrote it with a twist, how Niko was turned into a rat, and how his friends were the ones who did it, and I think it was good that you put detail into it. I like how you added real life issues into it, like moving. Also, the way you. . . conveyes the emotion of Sophie towards Niko in the story was interesting.

    Improvements. . . (I'm not good at these V.V Sorryyyyyyy)
    I guess you improve by MORE CHAPTER ( :D ) But um. . . a tiny bit more detail, and I guess an epilogue. . . and a prologue explaining why Sophie had to move?? Yeah, I couldn't find something to improve. I'm no good at improving stories. . . I'M SOOOOOORRRYYYYYY V.V

    But yeah, hope this is okay :)
    January 5th, 2012 at 04:41am
  • noriko.

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    Um. . . FUCKING AWESOME
    December 10th, 2011 at 02:40am
  • ACleverRubberCactus

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    This is such a great story, I really do love it. I love how Niko was fleshed out and how you managed to pull his friends into the story and use them to tell about Niko's past and you've actually made me like him more than any other character in the story. I personally adore rats, I think they're adorable but most people think they are gross and disgusting, they are infamous for being disease carriers, they are also really misunderstood which makes it an excellent animal for Niko. I just adore this
    December 1st, 2011 at 09:21pm
  • noriko.

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    Om nom nom.

    <3 it still :)
    Just so you know, if you add characters you get extra points for the story ^_^
    Just letting you know :3
    November 25th, 2011 at 01:42am
  • Jessii Tara;

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    Sorry for the double post.
    November 25th, 2011 at 12:10am
  • Jessii Tara;

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    This is awesome!
    November 25th, 2011 at 12:09am
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    This is awesome!
    November 25th, 2011 at 12:09am
  • noriko.

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    I like it ^-^

    I started laughing though (is that mean to the dumbo rat?) at the name bit ;3
    I want to know what the rat really is, because in the discription it said Sophie finds out that the rat isn't really a rat, so. . .

    Yeah, I <3 it :3
    November 6th, 2011 at 02:59am
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