Conquering America - Comments

I love your OCs they have strong realism that a lot of characters seriously lack.

You have excellent use of description, expecially about the surrounding enviroment.

Another thing I liked was the fact that you used normal situations to your advantage.

You insert hints that make the reader wonder and want to read more.

And oh yeah of course your story. It's to early for me to really understand whats going on, but so far it's interesting I subscribing to see were it leads.

Don't forget to comment on "Lost in Temptation," :)

PS. love your layout I suck at making them.

absolutely adore he layout hun, beautiful

you also have an amazing way of writing, keep it up:D

I really like where this is leading. The characters of the two new girls are very interesting, and I'm curious to know why they would dislike their father so much?

Your writing style is very nice. It's easy to read and descriptive. Unless it's just me, I couldn't find any errors. This is a really nice start. Great job! :D