I've Got Your Back - Comments

Comment swap always gives me stories I would have never come across on my own! Your story is the first slash story I've actually read and enjoyed. I like the way you describe getting the letter. My grandpa's brothers were all drafted into a war and they all say it was a lot like how you described Luke feeling. I also like how you used the words they would have back in that time frame. It gave the story a real edge to it. You are a wonderful writer. You've taken a forbidden topic, especially in that time frame, and made it a great story for all to read! As someone who is in the military I want to thank you for doing your research! Nothing make a story more appealing then someone who is obviously so devoted to making their story real and enjoyable. Thank you for the read! I'd definitely keep following!

This came across my comment swap. I was a little apprehensive as I've never read a same sex story before. Not usually one I jump onto; however, this was really good. I usually only read one or two chapters to get the gist of the story. But next thing I knew I was going onto Chapter 11 and getting into it. The way you write, the flow you put into your story makes it much easier to read. A lot of writers think the bigger and complicated the better but that's never the case. You don't want your readers to have issues reading. You do a wonderful job at portraying the "old speak" and the professionalism of how they spoke to ranks. You did good research on that, some start off and tend to lose the authenticity of the accent. I do think there is a lot of affection, I'm more into a slow and steady. But you are doing something right because it kept me reading. Great job, I know it's been years since you posted in this story but you should be very proud of this. It's definitely not like anything else I've ever read.

I enjoyed reading this story surprisingly, this type of story is normally not my cup of tea (I mean war not slash lol).
Very gripping and lovable characters. It flows well together making it easy to read :) (Meant to comment months ago :/)

Beautiful as always. I've missed this story, it's one of the few really well written stories on the internet. This should be published not Fifty Shades of Grey!

I can't even express how much I love this. It feels hopeless but pure, sad but also incredibly sweet. I wait with bated breath for the next update! :P

Yay! I thought you'd abandoned me! That chapter really wrenched my heart because I found myself in a weirdly similar position recently. I had been seeing someone over the summer and although we're not official, we both really like each other. He's in South Africa, working, until April and I got drunk one night and kissed someone who looked like him but felt awful afterwards.
Anywho, moping aside...I love this story! Please don't leave it hanging so long next time, I've missed reading this story.

Comment swap sent me here.

Firstly, I'm a complete sucker for any story set in any period of war. I'm the history geek everyone hates, haha! Your layout fits really well with the idea, and I love that you've used sepia tones throughout. Makes it seem more authentic. You've also explained something that quite a few people wouldn't know, and it really looks like you've did your research, which makes me extremely happy.

First thing I've noticed is a few grammatical discrepancies. 'Birthday' shouldn't have a capital at the beginning, and I don't know if you've stylised it to be so (and I do apologise if you have), but 'Letter' shouldn't either. There are a few commas missing here and there too, so I'd go back and read through some of the chapters aloud, just to check where you're pausing, and add some in where you think it is appropriate.

Moving on from the bad though, you have here a really unique storyline, and I do quite like it (this is coming from someone who tirelessly reads WW1 stories, so take that as a compliment, haha!). I love the way that you can get a glimpse of personalities through the way you write, which is quite informal, and fits in really well with the narrative stance you've taken. Your characterisation is already showing to be quite strong, and that's what I love most about your story.

You've got quite a fab little idea blossoming here. Just take more care with your technical accuracy whilst you write. Well done! :)

Love it. You are a brilliant writer and this story is captivating.

I gasped. They can't get split up! They just can't! I hope you're ok with everything and I'm really looking forward to the next chapter.

I think this is really interesting! Not the norm you find on this site and really well written :)

Your story idea is quite original. I must say I've never come across anything like your story on this site. I really like the way you write your chapters and how sometimes it's Matthew and then it will switch back to Luke. They both have a different voice. I see Matthew as the more tough military man and Luke being the softer of the two. "Because when we strip back the two uniforms and take away our languages we are ultimately the same: scared, young men being forced to fight in this war, a war which I wager none of us fully understand." I think that is my favorite thing you have written. I'm not sure why, but it just speaks to me. Well done. I hope you continue to write this story.

I found the start to this story quite touching. I don't know what it was. You just drew me in and brought me to the time where men were going to war and I really got choked up. Amazing, I really loved this. Sadie J Blue. xxx

I actually smiled when I saw you updated this story; I know it's not exactly happy but I love reading it. Where did you find the real story? I'm quite curious and may have read it. Another brilliant chapter, can't wait to read the next one!

First of all the beginning is, in a way, catchy (“The letter came today…”). The letter itself was awesome. And really, the note kinda made me not want to read this cause it’s just not my cup of tea, but you actually made all these things sound non-nasty hahaha if that’s even a word. And well, I like it’s about a war, it’s unique (you don’t get much of those on mibba). The description and sentence flow you have going on is awesome and your characters seem very real; just ordinary people, awesome character development. As for the whole History on the War, I have no idea how it went down really, but I like what you’ve written (accurate or not). The layout… could use some creative speck to it though; it’ll just be a lot more eye catching that way. Other than that, awesome job, keep it up! (:

When I began reading the summary, I was not sure if I was going to like it because I am not particularly fond of stories pertaining to war, but after reading through the first two chapters, I am very impressed with the way you delivered the story. I really loved the way you opened up the story with “The Letter came today…” It was a perfect hook and grabbed my attention from the very start until the finish. The way you portrayed “The Letter” was impeccable.

Your sentences seem to flow into one another and it almost feels like the character is speaking directly to me. I really appreciate your attention to detail. I love what you did in chapter 2 when you began describing the laughs of the two gentlemen: And then he laughed. I’m not sure why but I started laughing too. Great belly laughs that shook our frames and once we had started it was hard to stop.

I really enjoyed reading this story. I didn’t really notice any flaws, but I did notice that in the summary you wrote: Their lives set them appart from one another. -- which I think you meant to put 'apart'.

Please keep writing and keep up the great work.!

Thanks for your comment but yeah, as I've said I did a ton of research for this, I did History A level and I'm English too haha :)

I studied History as a GCSE (I'm English. Boom.) and we were taught how many English people didn't believe that the war would end and if it did, they believed they would be dead or they'd never be free. And those who did believe that the war would end, believed it'd be won by Christmas time.

I think you should do some research for this story, maybe plot it out in more detail and write it from your notes and maybe create your own layout...

Yeah it's written from the perspective of an English male and I read a few diaries leading up to this and most British people assumed they would win the war, in fact they believed the war would be won by Christmas! It's set in ww1 yeah, but obviously it wasn't called that then they called it 'the Great War' mainly :)

I like the layout you chose to go with your story. It fits for letters.

“I suppose she is afraid she will have no one left by the time we have won the war.” I’m guessing that no one knows who the war is going to be won by yet. So maybe “by the time the war is over” would be better?

I didn’t really catch it by just reading by the first chapter, but is this written from a guy’s POV? And this is written as if in WW1?

I like making layouts; if you want I can make one for you and share it. If you do decide you want me to make one for you, just email me on mibba. It might be better if you right be a small summery on each chapter so I can better help you out. I’m not really in the mood to read a lot. Sorry. Lol. Oh, and is this WW1 from the American POV?

intriguing
There is always two things I look for before reading a story. One is the first line of a summary and the other is the layout. This might seem kind of harsh but usually if the layout is no good I don't stick around but it wasn't the case here! I could tell from the summary that I've Got Your Back would be a very intriguing story. I'm not into reading slash but I quite enjoyed what I have read so far. I'm rooting for the two of them. Props for really knowing the facts and taking on a challenge that demands accuracy.