Until Tomorrow - Comments

just for future reference, there is little else that I find wrong with this other than your language and the rating given. cursing has a factor on the rating boards, and this would be rated as pg-13, plus, despite then mild depiction content.

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Becca should give Kelly a chance -_- like, Becca had her reasons for leaving.

OKAY I WANT MY STORY SELF TO EXPLAIN EVERYTHING TO JAKE AND FOR JAKE TO STILL LIKE ME ANYWAY.

I mean, I realize a lot of shit is about to hit the fan. Becca's gonna flip and Whak's gonna come to her aid. Cam is gonna be his brooding self at the bar. There will possibly be a brawl.

I love how Becca's like, "I need vodka." IT WAS A PERF LINE but I think I need vodka too and omg I was just laughing at poor Jake's confusion about my complicated life.

Update?:)

I need to seriously calm myself before I have a heart attack because these days, I'd be so unsurprised.

Aw omg but Jake's nerVOUS I wonder if he'll be nervous in real life?? Nah, probably not but omg I am and I'm definitely crowdsurfing ooh girl it's gonna be perf but okay back to the story my presh bby wore shoes aw he's so cute.

And oh god, I'll NEVER get tired of you and Whak in this story. beckaio 5ever and ugh you have this huge smile on your face as you run over to help with merch and HEY I'M HERE.

I've snuck into venues so many times because heY why support local bands by buying tickets?? I'm kidding obviously I usually just get in with my friends that are IN the bands but yes you again pinpoint my entire life by having me sneak in the side.

Aw Jake makes me smile how cute I mean, he really does but I mean, in this story's context it's actually so sweet. I'm glad I called him too. I mean, I know this is going to piss you off to no end because it's like I'm pushing myself into your friend group but deal with it ok Jake is my bby.

And then shit just gets really real. The world is obviously such a small place that I run into da boi from P3rth! I still have a little sweet spot in my heart for Cam. He's so brooding and ugh bassists. But I mean, he stops playing altogether when he sees me? Damn, do I leave that impression on people?

And that ending line omg it gave me chills because it's like, so much SHIT is about to ensue and I can't even wait to read it holy god I can't do it.

FUCK KNUCKLE I'M SCREAMING.

Okay omg Whakaio I love you in a brotherly way because aw he's so sweet. He obviously really cares and I love that. I also love the dynamic between you two and how it was friendly before it was romantic at all. And aw just that paragraph where you explain the ambiance in the van, I can picture it perfectly.

AND JAKE OKAY LIEK HE WON THE LOTTERY. But actually shit will probably hit the fan because hey, I'm the girl going to the show so how about THAT and also he should play without a shirt I hope that happens in real life.

"You were worth the wait."
That slayed me okay because honestly, that's how I am with letting people in and I would DIE to hear someone say those words to me okay and Whak is so presh like he calls you Indie and obvi is in love with you ok.

And don't be a stunad okay obviously I feel the same way I'm your sister for fucks sake and if you have to scream to let it out then scream. Do whatever it takes. Ending line was perf, as always.

She's definitely being an adequate amount of harsh okay? But I loved the beginning scene where they're fighting. It's such a sisterly way like with your snide remarks and I'm not gonna lie, I deserve it all. And I love how you don't even bring me along, god damn you.

But aw, I felt bad for my fictional self being all like "Don't go." It's good that I'm starting to wake up to the fact that leaving someone, a sister, without any explanation isn't something that gets forgiven instantly.

And FUCK YES I CALL JKEAE OMGA TWNETY DAYS UNTIL KAKE IS UNITED OGM I CAN'T EVEN HE IS PERF.

and, is this a kake story or camelly? i mean, idk man. idk.

first of all you double updated and got my poor heart pounding. second of all, YOU CALL THIS A CHAPTER. NOTHING HAPPENED. But okay, I don't have work tomorrow so when I get home from work today I will just update nlb like a FIEND, I'm talking four updates or something OKAY.

first of all you double updated and got my poor heart pounding. second of all, YOU CALL THIS A CHAPTER. NOTHING HAPPENED. But okay, I don't have work tomorrow so when I get home from work today I will just update nlb like a FIEND, I'm talking four updates or something OKAY.

Lovethisstory. Okaythatsall.

Ooooooh this is about to get crazayyy. More soon please!!!!

SHIT IS HEATIN' UP RIGHT NOW OH MY GOD.
I'm just imagining running into Cam and being like aw shit. But then I think in my head about running into Cam in real life and being like AW YEAHHH BITCHEZ. I'm definitely excited to see how um, Kelly reacts to seeing him. It should be interesting dsjflskdj. I hope they like me!! Omfg Becca they better like me. Is Whak gonna hate me for hurting his precious Indie? Idfk man.

I loved the idea of walking into her sister's room (it really is weird commenting when we're the characters) and having it being completely different. I liked how you wrote the interaction with her mom too. It's almost bittersweet. I love the idea of them being like a broken family. You see so many broken people but the family dynamic being broken is really different than what I've seen. You write it well.

Okay this comment is boring go read Never Look Back I updated it.

OH HI NEW COMMENTERS, I'M KELLY AND I'M AN INSUFFERABLE RUNAWAY.
Ooh, on to the comment.

I loved the reunion so much. First of all, it's very realistic. I didn't think there was going to be an overboard of joy and wow omg yes finally you're back I'm so happy hell yeah!! because I suck and it was my fault. I loved how it was like, the mother just being so happy and an almost bitter father who spent so much time looking for her, relieved to see her but still somewhat angry. I loved it. It was simple and quiet and probably almost upsetting for Kelly but her feelings don't matter. FUCK that bitch.

In Kelly's absence, her sister had become a runner, too. You are the Queen of ending lines okay? You really are. You're just so intense and aklfjdlskjf YOU SLAY ME.

Okay I'm such a bum I let two chapters slip by without commenting because I SUCK.

Whakaio wasn’t surprised when Becca climbed through his bedroom window. He always kept it unlocked, as Becca liked to show up at odd hours and climb in via the fire escape on his apartment building.

Okay, I screAMED. You climb through Whakaio's window and he just sits at his computer waiting for you with the window unlocked and he wonders if you're coming that night and just the CONCEPT. I WISH THIS WAS REAL.

And he calls you Indie that's TOO MUCH. BE STILL MY RACING HEART. How dare you not tell him about me! I mean, I know I'm an idiot and I left but I'm still fabulous so. BUT I just love your relationship with him and just how you both communicate it's just so cute and wonderful. I'm literally lost in Beckaio and I just sit here weeping and then I think, ISN'T THIS A CAMELLY STORY? But the horrible part is, I AIN'T EVEN MAD. I'm content to lose myself in Beckaio forever.

I'VE DONE MY PART NOW GIVE ME NEW CHAPTER AND OUR ANNIVERSARY IS FRIDAY.

I love this story. :)

I was intrigued by the summary, and then I read the first chapter and couldn't stop until I reached the chapter that you last updated.

Everything seems so real, nothing cliche especially at the reunion.

Well anyway I subscribed. :D

I like it, and well, if it was buffalo wings the sauce wouldn't be hot, it would be super freaking awesome. Just the way capture everyone's feelings. Usually I don't like stuff in the third person, but you do things with the third person that make it easy to read and relate. And not that I have anything againist a super broken character, it's just I love how you don't portray either of them as broken. Another thing, just love the reunion scene, it's not cliched with incessant hugging and crying, it's real.
So I'm subscribing, and I would love to see an update, NOW!

I only found this story a little while ago, but I LOVE IT SO MUCH!!!!!
More soon please :) it didn't take long for me to get hooked on this story :)

I love this so much. I'm finally home hooray!!! It's going to be awkward being reunited with the parentals though. I mean, after all that time HOW could they want to see me again. I dunno man, I dunno. That would srsly be the worst part for me.

You are the best writer ever ok??? One would think that there would be this huge, heart-warming reunion between two sisters but that's the exact opposite of what we got. I loved it. It was so simple, like I was coming home from a friend's house or something. The way you write the subtle changes of how you carry yourself and walk is just brilliant and your ending lines always, always leave me wanting more. They just strike a chord within me and somehow they're even more intense than the rest of these chapters. This whole thing is just brilliant, really.

BUT LET'S GET DOWN TO IT. WHAT IS HAPPENING YOU AND MR. TAAHI HMMMMHMHMHMHM? No but really, tell me about it. I could read about you and Whakaio for forever. "Only on Wednesdays." I still cackle about that to myself sometimes you clever little sklflskdj. CAM is also the love of my life where is he in this story??? In real life he's in Europe and he's also dyed his hair a bit lighter ooh fancy. Nah, but I love how he was earlier when I met him in the story. I mean, he sees right through me doesn't he? I love that. You're writing such a fab story omg okay. Yes.

Okay I love you talk to me sometime cool okay bye.

SOMEONE HAS COMMENTED ON THIS OTHER THAN MYSELF.
HELLO I AM ASSUMING YOUR NAME IS HANNAH, OTHER COMMENTER, I AM KELLY AS IN THE ONE FROM THE STORY HI HELLO THANK YOU FOR COMMENTING.

As for Whak, he is fab. He calls you Indie. He wants to know you. He wants to love you. I mean, this story is perfect and I'm sure I'll have more to say about the next one.

Oh, and the last line is my favorite. I love how you're just like, "My name is Becca." That's how you let him in. It's beautiful and mysterious and you're so interesting.

I would say update soon but I already know you are.

:3 This is also great! You know, I'm just going to say, I like your writing styles! :D
I like how short the chapters are, aha. I'm not to sure if there's a set plot going or anything, but I like it. My favorite chapter is 5 because it describes Kelly's new life. I wish I could leave a chunkier comment, but I read for funsies, not to analyze everything. x) I am subscribing, though! :D