July 29th, 2012 at 02:55am
Chroma - Comments
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Even though I'm not even halfway into your first chapter, I think this is amazing already just by the amount of times you've dropped the F bomb and by their awesome names, This definitely deserves more credit, I'm going to read on, although I'll probably space it out a bit.July 28th, 2012 at 11:27pm
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This is very good, update please.June 24th, 2012 at 05:18am
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Cool update! More :DApril 20th, 2012 at 01:36pm
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ooooooo >.o I know about burns trust me I had 1/2 of my body burnt when I was a kid and almost had to have skin grafts but at least now all I have is a tiny scar :) update again soon please :D things are getting pretty intense XDJanuary 17th, 2012 at 07:59am
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NO D: dang it I hate cliffhangers D:< Update again soon please I wanna see what happened! D:January 8th, 2012 at 01:08am
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^^ SAME :D lol I love this it is PERFECT :'D update again soon please!?January 2nd, 2012 at 08:33am
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Sooooo, I think I'm kind of in love with this story :) Update soon??? *subscribe*December 31st, 2011 at 02:22am
On a side note, I found one little error that bugged me a bit. Go to your chapter when Matei catches the Ghas Beetle. There's this sentence.
"He had green goo splattered on him, but a rub-it-in-your-face attitude and the dead, hairy, horned bug cupped in his hands."
He had a rub-it-in-your-face attitude cupped in his hands?
I would propose this to replace it!
"He had green goo splattered on him with a cocky smirk on his face and the dead, hairy, horned bug cupped in his hands."
But that is just me! I'll keep reading. I really like this!