The Kids Are All Fucked Up - Comments

Love it, I honestly feel sorry for William cuz his power is sucky as hell he makes straight women turn lesbian like what the hell kind of power is tht and what is Pete's power he is the only one without a power hmm he can be like the Alfred in the group omg tht will be hilarious pure comedy, anyhoo can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

i love this story, it's wonderful, i couldn't stop laughing at william's power! i hope you update soon!

I am not very familiar with the band PATD and its members, so I wasn't sure what to expect from them as characters, therefore I read it as if it were originial fiction instead of a bandfic.

I'll confess, I did not see those superpowers coming. It was a very good idea for a plot twist, but I couldn't help but feel that it was rushed; somehow it didn't fit with the moment. I know it was meant to be a 'freak' storm, but even then it felt crammed in there. The sex scene also jumped at me. I knew there was an attraction between Brendon and Ryan, but next thing I know they're having kinky sex. I found it strange, given that they just discovered they could read minds and create a doppelganger - it felt unnatural to have them think of sex at the moment. I was expecting more shock and concern over their superpowers, but the way they handled it felt as if they've had them for years. Almost too indifferent.

Personally, I found this chapter too long and too heavy to read. It would've been a smoother read if it had been separated into much shorter chapters. Instead of using ~*~ you could just start another chapter, or just mesh them together. It just removes the overall flow of the story.

As for your characters, I like them. They all have their peculiar quirks and personality. Again, I don't know if the band members do act this way in real life so I can't say that you were accurate in characterizing them in your story.

One error I couldn't overlook was the mistranslated Spanish. In one occasion Gabe said pendijo, which I believe you meant to say pendejo. Another one I noticed was: buffarónes. I'll be honest, I don't know what you wanted to say there but I know that that word doesn't exist in Spanish. Maybe you meant bufones (buffoons)?

I think you have a great plot to work on and wonderful narrating skills. Your description is right to the point and not distracting. It fits the mood of your story very well. You also know how to write believable dialogue that fits each character individually. I wish you luck with your story and hope you don't lose inspiration. Keep up the good work!

COBRA POWERS MAN HECK YES \m/ AND ADD SOME GABILLIAM DAMMIT

But yes man good job.

suppressed an eye roll, and stuck here for the next few weeks. Just a few errors in part one. Otherwise really good!

So good! I absolutely adore this. I like when they were going trough those interrogations and Pete was all like, "I saw him fu*k this other guy." just for some payback when the guy had been homophobic to them.

I am really interested to see what the others (who don't have powers) get. When Gabe found out he could talk to snakes I found it really funny. Especially the way he was freaking out and that one snake got him some food from the vending machine. You're welcome. lol.

I really like these sort of supernatural/power fics. I'm happy I came across this as it is a brilliant read. I can't wait for more :)

wow! Honestly, I would have probably never read a story like this without just randomly stumbling upon it. I don't usually read stories like this. But this story is incredibly intriguing and pulled me in! I love the large array of characters you have and the super powers are an interesting twist! The layout is also awesome. I especially like how the text has a shadow. Really cool! Nice job!

I love this story :) can't wait for the second update!!!

So I just finished the second chapter, and your writing is even better than I imagined. I love the amount of dialogue you use and just the overall interactions between the boys. Its actually pretty perfect. Hahah please continue, such great work :)

Great job on your first smut! But besides that, your writing is phenomenal. Extremely to read, plus its such a great storyline. Good luck!

Read the first three chapters and it's a good story....can't wait for everyone to get their powers, can't wait to read more update as soon as u can :)

I will love you forever if you manage to update every week. Challenge!!!!

ha.
you thought I was going to forget.
:--| nice to know you have faith in me reading your stuff.

lolomg Mykaela.
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that was totally great even though I had to read it super fast so my fiancee wouldn't catch me reading more gay porn xD

I really, really like this chapter :) I hope you post the next one soon, but it's okay if I have to wait a bit, I want you to be happy with what you write, and if you need time to do that then so be it :)
The chapter was really funny, and so far I think my favorite character is probably brendon...just because I think that really camp gay guys are awesome XD
So, yeah, post soon, or not...thanks :)

MISFITS PORN GOIBGOAOBIRGBOIBDFIBNS AND NOW I'M ALWAYS GOING TO THINK OF RUDY HAVING A THREESOME WITH HIM AND SOME GUY.

Anyway. Congrats on your first smut. :P Bravo.