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  • faerie_light

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    Great update!

    lol

    ok no, as a writer I do understand wanting more feedback than that. what can i say about your writing? well, i think that you come up with great plots that are compelling, your stories are well paced, your original characters are well thought out, believable and likable. and that's what makes your stories good. i do have to say, though, that sentence structure and proofreading is something you could keep an eye on. by sentence structure i would say run-on sentences and/or lack of punctuation that could make the sentences flow better. also you tend to leave out words here and there. that's something that proofing could eliminate. i'm not saying you don't proof, but you'd have to proof with that in mind. because i can proof for spelling and still not catch that i've left words out. know what i mean? the brain normally fills in the missing words if you don't train it. lol at least my brain does!
    April 3rd, 2008 at 11:34am
  • Leesa.Lust_x

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    your writing is pure awesome!!!
    just keep on what your doinn, I LUV IT!!
    April 3rd, 2008 at 05:57am
  • Moira Regina

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    Hmmm, what can I say about your writing? I'm learning from it a lot-you paint a picture and create emotions. Your plots are always amazing and you always leave me gasping for more.
    Whoa, how's that for a comment? =)
    April 3rd, 2008 at 05:37am
  • bloodravyn

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    POOR DANICA, SHE'S IN DEEP CRAP
    April 3rd, 2008 at 05:09am
  • mrsmiloventimiglia22

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    I like what you added to that chapter it made it a much better.

    i like it and i can't wait to read more
    April 3rd, 2008 at 04:59am
  • BabyDollBlue

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    woo i loved the update i felt bad for micheal for a second
    April 3rd, 2008 at 04:59am
  • Leesa.Lust_x

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    OMG what happens next?!
    hope syn doesnt kill her!!
    April 3rd, 2008 at 03:40am
  • Moira Regina

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    I'm officially jealous of your mind. UGH! lol.
    Car wreck, I love it. Syn is gonna have his fun...whoa, so rooting for the wrong side.XD
    April 2nd, 2008 at 03:40am
  • You've Changed Me

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    nice nice wreck the car wow i liked it
    April 1st, 2008 at 11:40pm
  • Doctor.Vengeance

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    dooode.....i love it
    April 1st, 2008 at 11:19pm
  • faerie_light

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    *needs m0ar updat3*
    April 1st, 2008 at 10:16pm
  • Squeak

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    this just keeps getting better and better with every chapter. i love it!
    April 1st, 2008 at 10:14pm
  • BabyDollBlue

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    woohoo i fuckin loved the updates
    April 1st, 2008 at 10:06pm
  • AlishaIeroVeex

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    Oh I loved them
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    April 1st, 2008 at 09:58pm
  • You've Changed Me

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    WOW I swear everytime u run u get caught haha its like jynxin ur self but loved the update
    April 1st, 2008 at 08:00pm
  • Leesa.Lust_x

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    omg you just going to leave me like that!?!
    ahhh more hun!!
    April 1st, 2008 at 07:18am
  • faerie_light

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    is it wrong that as soon as i saw the title "run" I started screaming "Run, b*tch, run!!!" lmao!!!

    I still love it.

    And I am still excite.
    April 1st, 2008 at 05:33am
  • Moira Regina

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    AH! kick and scream. kick and scream! lol.
    I was screaming, that's how good this is.
    April 1st, 2008 at 05:15am
  • bloodravyn

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    LOVED!!!
    April 1st, 2008 at 04:42am
  • You've Changed Me

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    love it amazing detail
    April 1st, 2008 at 01:05am
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