Drifting Into Deep Waters - Comments

@ aesparza
Thanks, I was wondering if anyone actually was reading this because I wasn't getting any sort of feedback Did you check out the other stuff yet and hopefully we'll see each other soon

I love the humor in the relationships! It's fun and real. I was told to watch how many time I use the word Up and Down in MS (manuscripts). Ck out how to write the break out novel. You got the voice down and the descriptions just that the theme of the story is a tad unclear. Your setting in Canada is great!

Firstly, I can't actually read the story on the custom layout so I had to change to default layout. I'd suggest changing the background to something more reader-friendly. The first line 'This is the prologue to the prequel of Moon Tears, feedback is appreciated.' should be in your authors notes; if a story editor see's that they'll ask you to move it so it's better to do it now.

there", should bethere,"
monsieur?"., should be monsieur." or monsieur,"

that applies to every single bit of speech. Seeing the extent of it, i'd highly suggest taking these chapters down and re-editing.

I like your descriptions, but at times the plot is a little plain. It's a nice piece, but needs a lot of work grammatically.