Into Thin Air - Comments

After realizing this is a sequel, I only read the first chapter (I dislike reading out of order), but I will probably come back later on. From what I read, though; this looks like a great story. (The name Darcy totally makes me think of the witch/fairy from the Winx Club, by the way). I love how you detailed you are. You make sure to explain things so the reader doesn't get lost. I also very much enjoyed the way that she describe others in her life. You get a very good feel on what the characters are like through that and the way they talk. I really enjoyed what I've read so far and can't wait to come back and read the first edition before finishing this ^_^

I am loving this story and I really hope you update soon!!! I loved the prequel as well!!! There are so many unanswered questions!!!

I see that you haven't updated I'm quite some time but that still won't stop be from commenting. I thoroughly enjoy both stories and now that I've reached the most updated chapter on this one, I need more. I want to know if they find Darcy or not? What really happened? Who are her captors? The juicy stuff. It's a beautiful story and I can't wait for an update!

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Well to be del, I like this story. I think I should read the sequel though...I love how you go into detail and everything. You explain the narrator's every move. And thats a good thing, you never get lost. You include little things, like dinner and even walking up the stairs. It's cool! I love the way she describes other characters in her life as well. There's enough dialogue, so you don't get bored. You can imagine the characters and from their dialogue their way of being. Rayden also seems like a cool person, someone you can imagine in the life of the main character...like it's meant to be or something. Not sure what's going to happen next, but as I read I look foreword to every chapter!!!

Looooove this!!! ❤

This is an amazing story. Please update soon!

Well, first and foremost, good job. You have a lovely writing style. I have not read the original story and this is very easy to understand without it. It actually makes the story a little bit more mysterious, actually. I came into this with no idea about what this was about, and now I think i'm reading about a stripper and her boyfriend, and I'm loving it! Thank God for comment swap or I may never have seen this.

Oh, gosh. This is horrible. Not the writing, of course, but what's happening. I love the new CIA guy, he's very kind. Update soon? <3

I just wanted to know when the next one will be up?

Your writing has got much better since the first story. Keep up the good work!

Great, but awesomely depressing at the same time. It worked :) Update soon!

I like! Recation from the cop was expected, but i loved the outrage. Does that make me a bad person? Lol i hope you update soon!

Great chapter man! The story is getting addictive xD pleasepleaseplease update soon!

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That was Superawesome!!!!!!! I think you described it all in a good way, and I love love love the drama. Update soon!

The scene with the guys asking them for "extra work" is very believable, you can easily put yourself in that situation. When it all unravels, when you find out her career, you realise what the men meant and it's a very clever way of telling the reader what they need to know. Rayden and Darcy's relationship is lovely, and the fact that he isn't very comfortable with her career is realistic and he is a very understanding person. I also really like the ending, it sums up a quiet relationship where the two people really care for each other, and that's always nice to read.

That was defiantly a cute chapter. It even made me smile. Kristina's boyfriend does seem sketchy, so I'm excited to see where that goes. I loved the whole talk of their future, it sounds perfect. Overall good chapter, update soon!

I only read chapter one, because I noticed this is a sequel, and I think I'll check out the prequel before reading this, so I have a better idea of what's going on (:

From what I read though; this looks like a great story. (I love the name Darcy, by the way). The scene where the guys are talking to Darcy and Kristina is uncomfortably believable (and I mean that in a good way). Rayden and Darcy have a very cute relationship and his protectiveness makes me smile. Your dialogues and descriptions are really good, and that starting scene was a great opener. Keep up the good work :)

Comment swap sent me back here, but instead of the usual random comments people post I've re-read this and will add something significant. The scene with the guys asking them for "extra work" is very believable, you can easily put yourself in that situation. When it all unravels, when you find out her career, you realise what the men meant and it's a very clever way of telling the reader what they need to know. Rayden and Darcy's relationship is lovely, and the fact that he isn't very comfortable with her career is realistic and he is a very understanding person. I also really like the ending, it sums up a quiet relationship where the two people really care for each other, and that's always nice to read.

Everything you wrote seems very believable, and I love the way you hint at her career without making it glaringly obvious like in some stories. Nothing is given to the reader and you're left guessing, and I couldn't tell what would happen next, it wasn't obvious what the next paragraph would contain and that is a rarity. Wonderful writing.