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@ Aurielle
Thank you so much for your fantastic comment!
We actually re-worked it and have reposted it on another site.

I can give you the link, if you are interested in reading the edited version.

Comment swap :)

It's not something I'd normally read but I did find it alright. At first I was a little Leary about the writing style, as there are quite a few simple sentences and the chapters a very short so it felt rushed to me. However as you kept writing your sentence structure became a little better. I'm not a huge fan of Sid Vicious or anything so it was a pretty interesting read for me. Over all I did enjoy it. I'd just recommend a little editing on the older chapters. Good job though :)

Loved the update, and your writing has improved so much! Im a huge fan of the sex pistols, and there is certainly a lack of sid vicious fanfiction and the ones that are out there aren't the longest or the best but I thoroughly enjoy your fanfiction! The way you write dealing with drug addictions and hard partying and the connection between Sid and Max I love so very much. I commend you're writing skills, my only advice would be small spelling or grammatical mistakes here or there. But other than that keep on going! I loved it! :)

Comment swap! c:

I've never read a Sid Vicious fic before, but it wasn't bad.

At the beginning of it, I was a little wary because of the writing style. There were a lot of really simple sentences and some redundant phrases, I think one at the very beginning about "stupid Nancy being a stupid bitch" or something like that.

However, the longer I read, the better your writing got! It was actually really cool to see your skills develop!

Also, this turned out to be really fun to read because it reminded me of when I'd write about Motley Crüe and hard drugs and parties. Definitely brought a smile to my face.

All I can really say is maybe go back and edit a bit. There are a lot of typos, but it's nothing readers can't just skim over.

(:

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Hey. This isn't the type of story that I'd usually read so I was really interested when I was given this in comment swap! The synopsis does a great job of drawing in the reader and you seem to have a good grasp on the characters, which is great. The only other things I would mention are fairly minor, like the odd spelling mistake here and there (such as in the synopsis) and maybe try and increase the length of the chapters? But it really was a pleasure reading your story :)

You haven't posted in a while, should I expect an update soon?

Everyone who comments on this story from now on, please do not remind me about having an apostrophe in the title. The error is on purpose, as it is written this way for the title of The Exploited song.

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I read the first couple of chapters and my heart does go out to her. I am not familiar with the characters, but you seem to have a nice set up here. The only thing that bothered me was the shortness of the chapters, but that's a persnal preference. Also, the title should have an apostraphe in Punks. But keep writing! It seems to be a good idea!

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I only read the first two chapters, but wow. I feel for Maxi. I know exactly what it's like to be in her position. I feel for her. I did notice that the title should be Punk's Not Dead. Nothing else really bothered me but how short the chapters are. But nothing's wrong with short chapters because I write them too, lol.
I think you've done great with what I've read so far. (:

That was heartbreaking.

I love this, post soon. Yea?
Please and with cherries on top?

I'm begging you to update this one as well. Those are my fav stories. ::crying:

Alright i only read one chapter and it was short. it only had like five paragraphs so i'm not sure if it would really be a chapter so i tried the next one and it was also short. i think you should spend more time learning how to add more description into you words and that will enable you to get charator and tone of voice into your situatuion. Simply swearing will not add character to you character. I am sorry but this isn't my type of read and i think you should try a new style if you take writting seriously. Try an original story, something that you own and you might see an improvement in your writing skill. This being that it is something from your head and not a pair of headphones, you will take care of the stories like it is your child.

So I have been reading 'Punks Not Dead' and I would really love to read more, but the thing stopping me is this:
Here is the great sounding story but not enough description to sink my teeth into.
But that's not to say I am not drawn in, as I said I want to read more. You have this way of creating a story that sets itself apart from what we already are seeing on Mibba, but just a few minor adjustments and it can be just stunning!

The title should be Punk's Not Dead. That's the first thing that I noticed and boy, it's irritated me straight away.

The transparency of the black on this layout makes the story harder to read, as does the red font; I had to click onto the default layout option just to read the first chapter.

This story is incredibly unique but, I just don't think you've developed it enough. You should really think about adding more description and work on your spelling and grammar. It's not a bad story but yeah; work on your grammar and spelling.

I read a few chapters but figured I'd comment now. First off nice layout, you might want to make the summary text a little smaller but it's still readable. Secondly your chapters are a little small. In some ways that's good. It is on the internet, they call be as small as you want, but the flow is usually better in longer chapters. Everything else seems to be good. Good luck with your story and future ones as well!

I really enjoy the uniqueness of this story. I've never read one like it on Mibba, which is lovely, because to be honest, there are plenty of stories on Mibba that sound uncannily similar. As far as I can see, your spelling and grammar are pretty much above reproach, which is always a nice touch. The characters are well developed, although more description is never a bad idea, and the plot is very intriguing, drawing the reader in from the very beginning. The only critique I have to offer is that the title should be Punk's Not Dead, not Punks (unless that was done purposely, in which case, disregard the critique entirely!).

Never read a Sex Pistols fanfic. So I chose a random chapter which led me far into the story so I had no idea what was happening. But as far as I can tell your writing is really good. No spelling, gramatical mistakes or anything you should fix up. I don't think you need to change anything. i really like what I read so far and I will make an effort to read it properly. =)

Sex Pistols.
Need I say more?

I love it.
Like, seriously.
Update.

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