January 7th, 2020 at 12:35pm
Okay, I am a little wary because I've heard and read plenty of stories with this same premise.
At first Jackson had me confused. I didn't know if he was her mom's boyfriend or what.
And who was the person giving the speech?
The first chapter was a little confusing to me because characters like Jackson were introduced a little late, so it was hard to contradict my assumptions with the truth. For example, I thought since Jackson was standing next to the mother and due to the way Janie reacted to him, that he was the mom's boyfriend. There are also a few issues with mechanics, such as when you wrote how Janie was putting on her boots or how she would hug someone.