Red August. - Comments

o.O Um... wow. That was seriously intense. Madly intense. I cannot believe how much your writing's developed. I love how many adjectives you use and the imagery you produce. Sheesh she's a little messed up though lol. All the references to blood and nightmares and the stuff in the background like her family... you have put a lot of effort into this. Fantastic! <3

OH MY GOD I'M SO GLAD YOU FINALLY POSTED THIS! And gosh was it amazing! Your writing is just so fluid and descriptive and dark that it blew me away. You've definitely improved a lot, Maddi! I could feel her emotions and the absolute loss of Holly and the old Ross and everything between. I could feel her numbness and her despair because it played in front of me as I read your words. Brilliant. The only thing I'd suggest is to make your story into paragraphs, because you can get reported for not having them, and also, a lot of people will overlook a story if it's just one big hunk of text. Which this story definitely doesn't deserve. XD