@Luv YourSassyDreamer thankyou very much ! yeah , i thought the chapters should be quick and have cliffhangers :3 oh , i'll edit it and fix that ! thank you very much fro pointing that out , i really appreciate it !
@iiLov3Yuhh!! thankyouu for keeping up with the story ! ( : & haha , i know right !
Oh, whoa. I love the emotion that you've captured within Esmeralda, especially since it's third person and everyone says that it's so hard to do such a thing. Even though the chapters are short, I'm not going to complain. They're perfect length for the story.
Just a quick note, though: A new paragraph begins when a different character speaks. I only noticed this error once, in the first chapter, but I just wanted to make sure you were aware of it.
Oh wow, I totally L♥V3 this alreadiee! Gosh, tht guy sounds horrible. Man, it sure must suck to be her. Well, cant wait to read some more of this. & hope u write more soon! =D