December 1st, 2012 at 08:45am
@ Sunber
thanks so much for such a helpful comment - I'm incredibly glad that you enjoyed my story so much, and I'm definitely going to pick apart the problems you mentioned and fix what I can (including using the suggestions in the sequel!)
anywho, getting to your comment in more detail...
i kind of understand what you mean about the emotion not quite being enough in parts - I felt somewhat the same as I was writing it, but that is the one error I can't seem to find a solution for. I have tried to rewrite/edit bits before, but I just can't seem to make it right. So I'll keep this in mind, but perhaps more for working on the sequel and my other stories than fixing this one, unless I suddenly get a brainwave =3
A huge thank you for pointing out the tense mistakes - I find them so annoying, and I'm always pointing them out to others, but I completely missed them in this one... definitely going to have to find them and fix them.
um. as for the formatting error, I feel kind of stupid for messing that up... again xD I just went through all my stories and spaced them that way because I hadn't spaced them enough last time -- I guess I need to go over the posting rules/standards and fix them all again, but at least this time I might get them right! =P
again, it makes me so happy just knowing that you think its a 'really great job' =D
Trying to convey emotion AFTER you've already written something is INCREDIBLY difficult. It's something that's much easier to do if you're conscious of it while writing it the first time. So, I definitely understand that you're having trouble with that.
Don't feel sorry about the formatting error! Everyone makes mistakes and you just didn't know
The Knowledge Base is really helpful for posting rules/standards and if you have any questions about anything you read in The Knowledge Base (or any other questions at all) feel free to contact me (or another Staff member) and we'd all be happy to help you out! :)
I'm glad I could make you happy, and you're welcome for the comment!