A better writer than me, love that you don't feel the need to make them do something after every other sentence. Also love the spacing for the dialog, its not clumped together and horrendous .
I really like Ainsley's spirit here, even though I do have a bit of a problem with the 'innocent girl and overly masculine guy' trope. I kind of wish she had continued to stick up for herself after pointing out that Hunter was only interested in the idea of their relationship. I'm kind of worried about the direction this is taking. It's weird that the fact that Hunter is touching Ainsley without her permission - even if she hasn't explicitly said no, she hasn't said yes either - and yet this isn't really portrayed as a negative thing. And it's weird that he's kind of using her lust for him against her to get what he wants. I mean, you can lust after someone and still know that you do not want to sleep with them. :/
The dialogue here is very believable, as are your characters. Your layout is as pretty as your writing! There's a really good balance between
I absolutely love your story!!! Actually, I love all your stories!!!! Please keep writing because I really want to find out what happens to their relationship!!
So, I really enjoyed this.(: You are a damn good and talented writer and I envy you for that (I'm a total shit writer). The layout was very nice as well. Oh! And your character names? I love them. I'm ALWAYS a sucker for good character names.
Firstly, love the layout. Secondly, impeccable grammar, I applaud you. Your writing is very good, as well. I like the story- it's unitque but cute and hot at the same time. Keep writing this. I feel like you can go far with it.
I don't even..... Its... What..? Fourth time, I think?
Copy&Paste time.
FINALLY, a new story. I've been getting the same one SEVEN TIMES.
The title reminded me of the TV show, that my dad loves. xD
Your writing skills are better than average, better than me for sure. I like your chapter names and your summary, the summary pulled me in and the first chapter caught me. And I think you should keep going, absolutely positively. !
Ohey, look. Same story again. Whatever. Copy&Paste time.
FINALLY, a new story. I've been getting the same one SEVEN TIMES.
The title reminded me of the TV show, that my dad loves. xD
Your writing skills are better than average, better than me for sure. I like your chapter names and your summary, the summary pulled me in and the first chapter caught me. And I think you should keep going, absolutely positively. !
FINALLY, a new story. I've been getting the same one SEVEN TIMES.
The title reminded me of the TV show, that my dad loves. xD
Your writing skills are better than average, better than me for sure. I like your chapter names and your summary, the summary pulled me in and the first chapter caught me. And I think you should keep going, absolutely positively. !
FINALLY, a new story. I've been getting the same one SEVEN TIMES.
The title reminded me of the TV show, that my dad loves. xD
Your writing skills are better than average, better than me for sure. I like your chapter names and your summary, the summary pulled me in and the first chapter caught me. And I think you should keep going, absolutely positively. !
This story is good when it comes to romance and the characters are very appealing. I only have one thing that I feel the need to complain about and that is that the start seamed very sudden and it was kind of a giant leap from an intimate moment which is either a flash-back or forward to the next chapter. It may have been better as a second chapter... but that is only me an I must congratulate you for great character structure.
This is such a cute story! I love both the characters. They seem well-developed and interesting. Ainsley is positively wonderful while I find Hunter interesting in a slightly cliche way. I enjoyed reading this. It was pretty fantastic. ^.^
I just love theway this starts... He can press me against a wall anyday.. lol
Love her name btw, I've never heard of or met an Ainsley before.
I also really love the line: “Idea. Hunter conquers innocent, little Ainsley. He has his way with her and then she’ll be another conquest of a list that's already far too long.”
lol. i liked this chapter! it was cute! XD i liked the end of the chapter when the held hands and you said "mistake number three" oooh i cant wait for drama that i know comes along with the lady hunter ;P