Fly Over Me Evil Angel - Comments

Here from le comment swap.
Firstly your layout is nice, possibly not the easiest to read, but never the less, good. Your first chapter draws the reader in, which is fantastic. Your actual writing is good, but try to improve the flow in future, you have some very awkward lines or places where it could be improved my adding or taking away a word, so watch out for that. Overall, I like it.

The opening draws you in, I'm a sucker for flashbacks and creepy towns. If you can avoid clichés this story has the potential to be pretty good. Your dialogue is good too. And I agree with the others actually, the layout hurt my eyes a bit, but you know it's the writing that counts :)

The story was half decent but the line spacing was a little too close which made my blind eyes get lost in the lines. Though the plot line is interesting, though I personally don't like first person. The caps don't need to be there to get the point across either.

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This is nice :) I don't really read a lot of stories like this, but I do like this story. I can tell it has potential. Anyway, I agree with ''PillowGhostie'' on the whole layout thing. It's a tad hard to see, but it is doable. (LOL, I said doable xD)

If you continue, I'll be sure to read :))

Love,
Salvedor

~Comment Swap~

I really adore this :)) I love the plot, and I also love the name ''Samara'' (did I spell it right?)

Anyway, I really enjoy this. It's been awhile since I've read something other than a MCR-based fan fiction, so it's refreshing xDD

The only thing I have an issue with is the layout. The sentences have no spece. They're all squashed together and it's hard to read without having your eyes mess up. But, as said, it's a layout. If you don't understand how to make them correctly, they're pesky.

Other than the layout I'm in love c: I can't wait to see where you take this!

~Hallie xx

i want more!

Just started reading. Please update soon!

Very neat and awesome so far. I like it. :)

i love this story so much :) it's great

I love this so far!!!
I seriously can't wait to see what happens!

Neat so far. :) I like it. I hope that the next chapter will go quite well, too. :)

I really like your story so far. It's funny that yesterday I just saw the Queen of the Damned and then I fnd this story how ironic. Anyway I am very surprised there is not a lot of comments because it is a very good story and it is very well written. I can not wait to read what happens with Mr. Tepes so I hope you can update as soon as possible.

Neat so far! :) Update as soon as you can, please. :)

Very awesome so far. I like it. Very neat, as well as very well-written, too. :) And the name Abigail is so cool (since it's my name as well). :)
Keep up your super-neat, very creative and phenomenally beautiful writing! :)