The Diaries of a Psychopath - Comments

Okay, I am not a fan of the layout in the slightest, normally I don't mind these things but the red on black was seriously giving me a headache. If you ever wanted any help with layouts you could message me, I'd be happy to help?
Anyway, the summary was really intriguing, the last sentence really drags you in.
Okay, this style is quite confusing to me, I've not come across it before, is it like a play with stage directions? The dialogue are is very good, the short sentences portray the insanity and the panic very well but when you suddenly change to third person it breaks the flow and you lose quite a bit of tension. I'm not entirely sure what you were going for.
Okay, chapter 4 is so much better! This is actually really scary, but I've always found dolls insanely creepy.
Overall, this story doesn't really seem to fully begin until chapter 4, for me any way, but after that point it's really good and I think you should go back and maybe rewrite the past chapters in the same style?

Few stories outside of what Stephen King writes can actually make me scared, but man do I hate clowns. So phobic. Anyway. Love the asylum setting :) So classic and creepy. And I also love how all the characters have such different personalities and how the way you write all their thoughts is different.

Wow, this story is incredibly creepy. I could honestly feel the suspense and emotions of each of the characters. It was really interesting to read and to be able to hear the different voices of each of them.

My only suggestion is that you could describe the pieces in bold in the characters' POV, only because it makes it seem more like a script than a story.

Other than that, this story is absolutely amazing. Good job!

Jesus. That's all I can really say when I began reading this. O_O And I thought Tate Langdon was a psychopath; this makes him look like a kitty, honestly, lmfao.

Angie's chapter really...triggered me, honestly. As a recovering self-harmer, reading about razor blades and such kind of gives my heart a little jump. It's weird, but yeah. Actually imagining everything freaked me out, bahaha. But not in a bad way! I really enjoy things like this (minus the triggering stuff.) Belinda's chapter, honestly, is going to give me nightmares. Clowns and I don't mix. At all. It's kind of a childhood phobia for me. Damn clowns with their insane makeup. Her chapter reminds me of the Stephen King novel, "It". Nottt quite the thing you read before bed, baha!

I really enjoyed this; your style is entirely your own and I applaud you for that. Awesome job on this, my friend! <3

Very creepy...I applaud the style you're using with this. Very quick, very jolting, very sharp. It suits the frantic nature of the setting. I like the wording of the narrator, as well - very detached from reality. It's eerie.

That being said, you'll need to begin narrating the actions of the characters, not placing them in asterisks (**). It can be reported and/or deleted if those aren't edited. You never see actions in asterisks in novels, do you? :P

Very good, though, I enjoyed that.

this was slightly confusing, but i liked it. i could see it happening in my head, and i could see a great movie with it. well done!

(chapter four was my fave!)

Chapter 4 is my favorite! But I liked them all. Interesting story you got going on here. :D

Belinda's chapter scared me the most, I think. I freaking hate clowns.

But this entire story itself gave me the creeps, in a good way. The layout was sketchy and the dialogue was intense and it was really good. The doctor is definitely jacked up. But it was a good story, really well-written.

Oh this is good. Not too long, I can pay attention, not skim, its completely creepy, it reminds me of the first batman, with the guy who wore the scare crow mask and drugged the victims and scared them out of their wits...He was in Inception...
Wonderfully creepy and amazingly horrifying, I am so subscribing.

Wow, the second paragraph of chapter three was intense. Using a spoonto gouge someone's eyes out? Sounds kinda painful.

So, I'm guessing his fear is needles..? I have a slight fear so I can kind of relate to Sebastin.

Great job, though. I'm going to stay subscribed to this story!

Okay the second chapter had me almost peeing myself... Clowns scare the shit out of me, they really do. Haha, Belinda is my aunts name..

Anyway, I couldn't really feel anything with this chapter like I could in the first. I really couldn't feel what Belinda was feeling. I think you should make it a little more descriptive, though.

The first chapter was very good. Lots of description. Like I was feeling what the main character was.

One thing I would recommend for this chapter, though, is to not put the **. You should explain what he did, not use the asterisks. This was still a great first chapter, though.

this is so different... I love it! Sweet layout as well! Very fucked up and spooky.(:

This is really good , I love stuff like this about asylums and psychology. I'd love it if the chapters were a bit longer though. Please update again soon =)