October 1st, 2012 at 06:42am
All I've Ever Wanted - Comments
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their is a lot of smiling going on XDOctober 1st, 2012 at 02:00am
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AwwSeptember 29th, 2012 at 11:48pm
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AWWWW <33333 :',','D
Don't blame me - but I just like cried happily here :',',D
Update?!September 29th, 2012 at 07:17pm -
Awe
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ahhhh!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! that was the sweetest proposal ever!!!!!! LOVELOVELOVE! cannot wait for more :DSeptember 29th, 2012 at 12:59am
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great update. Harry is so sweet. Update soon please? :)September 29th, 2012 at 12:51am
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AwwSeptember 22nd, 2012 at 08:56pm
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Awwww cute :DSeptember 22nd, 2012 at 12:53am
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Cuteee! Updateeee? :)September 20th, 2012 at 06:10pm
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<3
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They will go all the way one day. Trust me.
Very sweet and right to the point. I enjoyed it. :)September 20th, 2012 at 03:54am -
I can't wait to see where they go. Update soon love?September 20th, 2012 at 02:15am
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Lovely update! <3 I read that so fast because I was eager to find out what happened. Date night seems like a lot of fun. Haha. <3 I'm completely jealous of Sam since she's with Harry and all. Update soon!September 20th, 2012 at 12:47am
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brilliant update! Harry and Sam are too adorable!!!!! please update soon!! :DSeptember 20th, 2012 at 12:46am
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I love this story. Very well writtenSeptember 18th, 2012 at 01:38am
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You have a good foundation for your story, and Harry and Sam are very cute. I also liked Louis' "you stole my Harry from me" part, and the "guys and their video games" part!
However, you really need to work on writing in the same tense. If you start writing in present tense, it needs to be present all the way through unless there is a flashback situation. Also, putting the text message in italics would make it easier to understand. Finally, varying your word choice would make your story more interesting. You use the word "direction" too often. Instead of saying "good" or "smiled" you could say "fantastic, wonderful, etc." and "grinned, smirked, etc."
I hope my comments help you make your story even more amazing. Good luck! :)September 15th, 2012 at 02:10am -
amazing! i love how harry and same are together :) too cute!!! and now all the boys have someone! yay! update soon please?September 12th, 2012 at 04:53am
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Mmmmmmm, things are getting steamy!! :)
I loved this chapter and I don't care what you say!! I love this story. :)
Update soon please!September 11th, 2012 at 08:38pm -
Harry is so cute c:
Update soon, yeah? (:September 11th, 2012 at 04:55pm
ahhhhh I looove it<3