Yay!! This story is amazing! And yes I'm going to comment after every chapter. "Crap. I’m gonna be eaten by a big beefy black man" :lmfao That was really great! I always try to find soemthing you could improve on (since you said you wanted to hear it) but I couldn't find ANYTHING to criticize on this chapter so you win!
:crazy: Yay an update! :shock: (<--Shockerd smiley :mrgreen:) You be Ms. Speedy McSpeedy with updates! I love it (and you :P) though! More! More! More!
Now for my only criticism: The dialogue was little weird in some places, like it didn't flow right. An easily fixed thing so don't even worry about it.
I LOVE IT CHELL!!! More more! It is really good so no more telling me you can't write! The first bit made me :shock:! Then :cheese: then ! (The last bit because you write good) Wubbles! I'm gonna comment every chapter! And I'm your first subscriber!
By the way... PAGE CLAIM!!!!!!!!! I popped your comment cherry! I ded this page to you! I name this page: Jeff, The God Of Hairdoos:crazy: