Little Miss Innocent - Comments

I like your writing style girl! :D I like the way you write in details. I like details, a lot.

Title and Layout
Both are simple and to the point. The layout is a little under done, but I prefer that to crazy colours, so I can't fault you there.

Grammar and Spelling
There was one place where you wrote:
...music shop.” Jessica replied. There should be a comma not a period before Jessica replied.

Other than that, not a typo in sight :) Well done. Grammar or whatever can always be revised.

Plot
I was not expecting James to be a porn star . The story is a little slow-moving. I wasn't sure where you were going with it until the third chapter. But it does seem super original; not like the mass-produced plot lines that seems to crop up all too often.

@ Synyster Gates;
Thank you so much!!

I really like this. Very well written, and detailed. Over all I really love this and it's very interesting too.

@ miss zombie.
Aw! Thank you so much love! You totally made me go on a rate about my love for James Deen to my mama and grandmother. Good lord I question my sanity at times. I love your comment, I'm finally starting to get more motivated to continue writing this! So thank you!

She didn't think that would mean falling for a porn star..

Omg. That sentence intrigued me, and I don't even know why. It was just like: normal girl, nothing exciting happens to her, and then BAM! Porn star.

This is definitely an interesting story. I don't know much about James Deen; only that he's going to be starring alongside Lindsay Lohan in an upcoming, non-porn movie. So, that actually helped draw me in even more because I felt like one of Hannah's peers, in not knowing who James really is. I can relate to them, sort of. :)

I really like how everything is progressing, and I can't wait to see where you go with this. More soon, please!

@ chasing carousels;

@ Suck My Kiss.
Oh I didn't know that :P You're welcome!

@ chasing carousels;
Thank you! "James Deen" is an actual porn star.. someone she has a major crush on and everything. I'm going to go back and fix grammar issues and such. Thank you for the comment love!

This is definitely something interesting. I really like your writing style. You do have some grammar mistakes, but it isn't a big deal. I'm a little confused with the whole "James Deen" thing. I can't understand from the first chapter if hes real or if he's a figment of her imagination.

Awesome! Thank you for your support! I'm going to go back and look at the grammar mistakes c:
I'm trying to write, I have an actual idea of where I'm going with this I just need to write it.

Hmmm... this is really interesting. I don't think I've ever read anything like this before but I like it. Even though you have some grammar mistakes. (Which, I don't really judge because in my stories I'm always fucking up so.. -shrug- I understand love <3) But overall this is a really really good stories, and I will be reading more so update soon.

I'm trying! Thank you for reading! <3

Keep goiiing!!!

Thank you my love! I love you too! <3

That was not bad! Especially since you had no idea what you wanted to do with it. I happen to think that you're progressing really well with it. Its only the 2nd chapter! Anywho, I love you dear and I think you're doing a fantastic job!

Thanks! x3

Can't wait to see where you go with this
=)
But I like it so far

Thank you love! <3

Girl, I can't even. This was great! I LOVELOVELOVE James Deen! Good job!