July 24th, 2012 at 04:42am
Voices Carry - Comments
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UPDATED LATER TONIGHT OR TOMORROW! WORKING ON IT NOW!!July 23rd, 2012 at 10:09pm
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I'm doing to die if you don't update. Please.July 23rd, 2012 at 07:20am
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To anyone who is still with me, sorry I haven't updated. I know you guys are waiting and I'm updating SOON. Promise. <3July 15th, 2012 at 05:30pm
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Please update this? I'm dying, it's my favorite fic ever. <3July 14th, 2012 at 11:40pm
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I absolutely love this story! update soon! :)July 5th, 2012 at 07:08am
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Mm yes, and this is where I comment xD
I really like your title. I dunno, it's just really catchy. And the layout is nice and simple :)
The opening scene was done really well. Harry's reactions were very realistic, and I could picture everything very clearly. In fact, the characterization of both of them through the first chapter. This is really important, since I haven't the first clue about One Direction, that I could keep up. Harry is kind of adorably ignorant xD
My only qualms would have to be centering around the party. How big is the house where the party is at? I mean, I have a pretty good sized house and thirty people in it would be a zoo. Three hundred is like... my entire graduating class. I mean, if it's a mansion and stuff, that's great, but it would be nice to know, otherwise I'm like, "Wait... what?"
The second thing was how they talk when they're drunk. It just doesn't read realistically. So maybe play around with that. I'm not saying get drunk and write dialogue (that would be very strange ) but like, talk how they would talk and try and imitate it another way. How it's written now, I don't know how to read it in my head and it's kind of confusing. At first, I thought they were really cold and stuttering.
Other than those two things, I really like how you've set up the rest of the story :) It's a really interesting way to start something off, and I hope you continue on with what you've got.
CheersJuly 4th, 2012 at 06:43am -
LOUIS! DO.THE.SURGERY! And tell Harry you love him.
UPDATE! :):):):)July 2nd, 2012 at 02:06am -
DAMMIT LOUIS TELL HIM YOU LOVE HIM. omg the whole megaphone scene, fhfjeifudjdjdjvJune 30th, 2012 at 03:14am
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Omg I actually don't think I can deal with waiting for this, please please pleaaaase update soon! <3June 27th, 2012 at 12:45pm
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OH MY GOD. This story is so great. The flashback with Harry and Louis was so perfect. God, I love them together in this story. AND LOUIS NEEDS TO GET THE SURGERY. Update soon because I need to know why Louis lied to Harry! :DJune 27th, 2012 at 12:19am
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This is truly an amazing story, my emotions were in turmoil. I laughed at the cuteness of Louis's speakerphone announcement but my heart broke when Harry found Louis like that. This is so sad, I'm interested to know why Louis won't take the surgery....June 26th, 2012 at 12:15pm
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I do not really read stories like this, but I am quite interested in it. I'm really interested in knowing if he's going to do the surgery or not or if Harry and Louis are gonna turn out gooood. But I am suuuuper excited to read another update (:June 26th, 2012 at 05:18am
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This is just too beautiful. And sad. Update soon!June 26th, 2012 at 03:20am
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My gosh my poor Boo Bear I can't even. This story is so sad but so wonderful and ugh I have too many feels and emotions when I read this.
Can't wait until the next update!June 26th, 2012 at 02:16am -
Tears in my eyes! Tears in my freakin' eyes, man! Update as soon as you are able! <3 I can't wait!June 26th, 2012 at 02:01am
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OH M GOD!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
this story is beautiful...
update soon.June 26th, 2012 at 01:33am -
Oh my! I love this story so much!
Please update soon?(:June 26th, 2012 at 01:22am -
Im freaking for the next chapter! :)June 25th, 2012 at 10:58pm
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I love this so far!
Update soon? (:June 25th, 2012 at 10:31pm
Oh my god, I can't even begin to describe - Lou's reasoning makes perfect sense but it's also so bloody stupid. I loved it.