Welcome, to the 92nd Annual Hunger Games. - Comments

Thanks for your comment. :) Its been a very long time since I've worked on this story and I think now I might go back through it and do some editing. I'm really bad for making the "were" "where" typo. If you look under the characters tab I have a picture to go with every character that is going to be relevant in this story.

From Comment Swap.
I just want to start out by saying I too really like your banner, I loathe making banners so I always put it off or never even make one so I admire the time you obviously took on it. I want to quickly point out a typo I think I saw, "challenged children where turned into" I think instead of putting where you meant to put were. I would've liked to have seen what Bry's personally opinions of the Shelter were or more on what it was like there. I think you should also maybe have a list of links to pictures of the characters or the people who you think would look like them. Putting faces to names always makes reading a story easier for me. I found it really interesting that Bry didn't want to say her mothers name and I loved how you explained her reasoning. Though I am a little confused about something, it seems as though Bry has had very little contact with her parents and I was just wondering if I was correct in that assumption. I'm also interested to know if you plan on having Gale make an appearance at some point. I typically don't read Hunger Games fanfic but I did enjoy this and I know any other Hunger Games fan is going to adore this.

From comment swap.
I never comment on layouts/banners, but wow yours is great. I'm just really digging the banner.
Your descriptions are lovely, but you don't overflow your writing with nothing but them; you've found a nice balance. So many other authors will have so much that I can hardly understand the story. You set the scene amazingly as well with your sense of detail. The plot of this story is also amazing. I've never seen an au like this before, and I'll definitely be reading more!

Here from Le Comment Swap.
So firstly, you need to capitalize every word in the story title, I believe it's some kind of rule on Mibba or something. I like the banner, it's very eye catching. I dislike how all your text is centered to the page, it made it hard to follow when I was reading. Along with that the text is very small too. But enough with me criticizing the layout!
I like your plot, although I haven't read or seen the Hunger Games, I could still manage to follow the story, which was nice. Your descriptions are very good, and I overall and a fan of your writing style. Keep it up. Also sorry if I came of harsh about your layout!

I absolutely love this and I am so so glad I was sent here! Your writing is amazing, your sense of detail and the way you set all the scenes is great. I love how Bryanna is so cold and tries to be emotionless. She is very much how Katniss wishes she could be during the game but of course it was Katniss's love for other and emotions that were always her downfall. I don't think Bryanna is going to have this problem! But I will definitely continue to read this and I have subscribed and recommended. I also really enjoy your writing as well as the theme of this story so I will be checking out your other stories!

I have to say that I love the descriptions of this; extremely detailed. I also love how long this chapter was. From comment swap by the way. I do however have one thin: in this sentence {You could nothing but the blowing wind in the packed plaza...} might want to reread it. Can't wait to get started on the next chapter.

i really love this! update soon please :)

So I don't really like the Hunger Games, I haven't seen the movie or read the books so I'm not saying I won't give it a chance, but because I don't know much about The Hunger Games, I didn't really understand much. It was a good plot though, is that the same plot used in the movie? Keep Writing your good at it

Oh my gosh. I can't wait for you to update. I have to know what' coming next. Thank you for entering in my contest. Judging will end today.

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Comment swap brought me to this story and I'll be honest with you that I have no clue what this is besides something with The Hunger Games. I've never read the book nor watched the movie but I did read this and thought it was really good. I enjoyed it. :) I'll recommend it and subscribe to it.

If you could fix your layout, make the font larger, extend the actual story area, it would make this much more bearable. You've changed aspects from the actual book as well, I don't see Effie as a mother type, but that could just me her maturing for almost 20 years... This still isn't my favorite and I'm still incredibly confused, but that doesn't take much...

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I'm not a huge fan of The Hunger Games. I have only read the first book but this was awesome. The summary could use some work and the chapters are much too long. You could probably cut them in half. But fantastic writing. The plot is very original. :)

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Normally I don't read these types of stories. It could use some work. There were many places where words were missing and not allowing a sentence to flow like it should. I had to reread things several times to realize exactly what was going on. In my opinion, the chapter is a bit too long; nothing against longer chapters but since it's not a one shot I feel it doesn't need to be nearly as long as this. I was starting to get a bit annoyed at the length honestly. There were a few places as well that words were mixed up. For instance, the bit about the girl putting her arm around the main character. It read "...her arm around awkwardly my shoulders..." when it should have read something like "her arm awkwardly around my shoulders..." the original way makes no sense with the word arrangement. Over all, for the type of story it is it's decent but needs some work with the wording, missing words, not too much detail (which I seemed to find a lot of seemingly unnecessary detail), etc. But it is your story and you decide how you would like to cater to your readers :)

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You are a very talented writer! I kind of envy you!

Heres Why:
-You have perfect grammar
-The characters are great
-Very nice details

I subcribed, i would like to see where you take this. good luck on your story and update lots!

I've never read the hunger games so I don't really know what's going on. Besides that, the plot seems interesting and I like how descriptive you are and your use of proper grammar is great. Like I said, not much into the hunger games, but I will give this story a shot. :) Great work and can't wait for an update.

Comment Swap brought me here. I’m not much into ‘The Hunger Games.’ but I will say you have a really amazing way with words! The descriptions are very visual and it’s just an all around great read so far. I also like the layout, it’s easy to read. Keep up the great writing!

Comment Swap brought me here. I’m not much into ‘The Hunger Games.’ but I will say you have a really amazing way with words! The descriptions are very visual and it’s just an all around great read so far. I also like the layout, it’s easy to read. Keep up the great writing!

Oh, forgive me last comment's typos. [I was reading stories on my phone, so auto-in-correct stepped in.] Again, remarkable imagery. Each person described I could see almost instantly.

I have no knowledge of what happened in the other books other than the first, so forgive me if I get a little lost, but for the most part this is a very creative & wonderful idea.

Ooh, double volunteers! Your writing is very beautiful. Your description is fantastic. Helped me imagine it wat better. Good job!

my last comment went a bit weired so egnore it, So Found this on comment swap and I must say I dont really read thing's like this especially since I have never seen the hunger games so I was a bit lost but I still loved it and it just gave me the incentive to go and watch it.
While I was reading this I concerntrated on your writing style, you dont waffle on a lot which i think is a good thing so anyways im definatly going to keep reading so update soon please :D