Never My Intention to Brag - Comments

While I'm not the biggest fan of All Time Low, I felt like I didn't have to be because of the way you described personalities and actions of the other members. Your grammar, spelling, and formatting of the chapters could use some work so I do recommend either editing your work or asking for help on doing it because some places it makes it hard to read because of the errors. While I'm not a big band-fic reader, I do enjoy what plot you have going on in the story so far and I will check back to see how it progresses and how your characters continue to grow and interact with one another.

Hey there! I'm from comment swap. I admit that you have a knack for describing but the grammar and punctuation could use some work. I'm just giving constructive criticism and I hope you won't take it to heart. Peace! :)

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Well how do I start, it really does attract my attention as a fan of All Time Low I wondered what an original character story would be. I was really used to just seeing Jalex, but this one did get to me. Obviously in a good way. I like how you give the character the name and then make an ironic statement about it in the summary. And the way you give chapter titles makes you wonder how they connect to the chapter itself. Once you read the chapter you're like 'fuck that's good'. The whole idea about making the characters cuss is your way of style and you make that a part of your story. It makes it realistic and not some cliche thing of only 'happiness'. The smut itself was a bit like, 'what am I looking at?' I don't want to sound weird or rude, but I had to read twice. Other than that. It was really good! Good job! There should really be more like this and it's good to see that you're one of those good writers!

I'm from comment swap and the freaking thing will not work, asked me to comment again...so here it is so having read a few more of your chapters I'm picking up on how descriptive you are, it's really good and giving me inspiration for my story. I always like to read other writers work as it helps me to reflect on my own, so thanks very much. X

I'm from comment swap and the freaking thing will not work, asked me to comment again...so here it is so having read a few more of your chapters I'm picking up on how descriptive you are, it's really good and giving me inspiration for my story. I always like to read other writers work as it helps me to reflect on my own, so thanks very much. X

Dont know the band that well but loved the obscene chapter!! Lots of swearing though :/ made me wish I never quit smoking!

Apart from the fact that I like their music and do enjoy it. I have to admit that I know nothing about this band and surely, I never checked out their fanfiction.
Now, for your writing, it's pretty good but the second chapter was a little difficult for me to read, maybe because it seemed congested with all the words. Overall, you're doing a great job with the story. Keep writing. :)

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Not the worst grammar I've seen, but could be better.
Props for the obscenities (: very much my taste.
It took me a while to figure out who the story was about and that was from the other comments, haha.

Wow,so, first off let me tell you that you are a good writer. I usually don't read too many ATL fan fictions even though I am a fan, but yours caught my attention to the fullest. The part with ben and faith was pretty intense, I liked that chapter most of all seeing as you were very detailed with the situation and everything. There was a couple of errors that I did notice though with the grammar and punctuation, but nothing too serious to really worry about. So all in all, good story and I definitely want to keep reading. Keep up the good work and remember have fun with writing

your plot is pretty good. There does seem to be a couple of those terribly cliche things that get thrown into any story. However you have a very different idea behind this so with a bit of editing and slightly clearer thoughts, you should be good!

Comment Swap! Oh my gosh I keep getting ATL fanfics! I feel like my comment is so worthless since I am not a fan of the band. Haha But let me write on. I like the chapter I do think the type of sister being shitty and having lame friends is a tad over done in these type of stories but you know they always work out but I'm slightly used to them. (Maybe I've been reading too much fanfic...geez I'm old.) Also I see that there is a few comments bout the cursing and honestly thats as real as a person whos friends with a band will get. So I agree with everyone else. Keep up with it.

Good story so far.

Comment Swap! Okay reading the first chapter was great and the friendships are great. I could understand the plot. Then i got to chapter two and things kind of got confusing because nothing was spaced and instead of using quotation marks you used apostophes. Otherwise then you have a good story going. I'm not an ATL fan, but I do want to see them at warped. Keep up the good work and keep up the vulgarity lol. The way you write is what makes your story unique :)

Comment Swap brought me here.. Now, I usually don't read ATL stories, so I only just read the first chapter...But it was quite nice, even if I wasn't really into it. The story itself is good! Your writing is nice as well, I just think, it would be even better if you would leave out the "fuck"'s and stuff. It makes it way more enjoyable to read :)

Helllo, I'm here via comment swap.
I was really excited when I saw that this was an ATL story, I love them. Anyways, your first chapter is pretty good and I disagree with the person who said to tone down the vulgarity. I feel like anyone who's friends with the band would definitely have to swear like a sailor. I really like your concept, but I would pay attention to separating sentences so the readers can understand your flow more. Other than that, good job.

-Jess xx

Helllo, I'm here via comment swap.
I was really excited when I saw that this was an ATL story, I love them. Anyways, your first chapter is pretty good and I disagree with the person who said to tone down the vulgarity. I feel like anyone who's friends with the band would definitely have to swear like a sailor. I really like your concept, but I would pay attention to separating sentences so the readers can understand your flow more. Other than that, good job.

-Jess xx

Update soon, please? I'm interested to see where this is going. Oh, and something I neglected to mention before, I thin, the whole idea of All Time Low having a female guitarist in the band is a pretty sweet prospect. The only thing you might want to work on would be to make your descriptions a little more vivid. Can't wait to read more, hope you update soon!!!! :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-)

Well I haven't really seen an All Time Low story that had a female character as the guitarist in the band, so that gives you some unique points for sure.But also the fact that it's an ATL story in general scores even more points with me.I think this is a really good story and I was hooked after the first chapter.Your a good writer, please update soon I'm looking forward to reading more :)

Neat story, I really like it! :-) You've definatly got some unique plot lines and twists ahead and I'm looking forward to them! As for the obscene language keep it up. Its how people really talk, right? I mean I do, lol. I can't wait to read more!!!! :-) :-) :-) :-) :-)