Rocks Painted Gold - Comments

OH MY GOD.
I only just noticed that the back ground is lyrics from Seize the Day. I am so unobservant.
It was nice to have some good old Forest normalness aswell as him finally expressing all his feelings to someone he feels he can trust.
Also loved the bit about him saving people without even relising he is doing it.

Poor Hazel. She's so desperate. Anyways...

Hazel sat on Matt’s couch, Val next to her as she cried No coma. Hazel left the house, just wanting Same here.

I don't know who to hug. Shadow or Hazel or Forest. Hazel probably needs it the most though.

Shadow is so amazing. I love his emotions and just the way he acts.

and the feeling….was beautiful. I feel like it would work better if was was next to feeling instead of beautiful. So like and the feeling was...beautiful.

I had to admit, that Kylie, she was a great kisser No comas.

I really liked this chapter. I like how it played both Forest and Shadow. And Forest's last thought for Shadow not to kill Mark.

Speaking of Mark, I cringed thinking about Domino. Still a creepy creepy bloke.

I don't have much to say for this chapter. I really like Jack though. He seems like a nice guy that would be willing to help Forest if he were to ask.

She had damn well know how to deal with some rain I don't even. I'm confused!! She had damn well known how to deal with some rain?

Hazel's reaction to finding out that Forest was living so close was almost heartbreaking. And Jimmy, well, yeah. Haha.

It's a good chapter. Onto the next I say!!

Soo...

This is the last time I'm going to comment on it, I swear: “Would if I could, I’ll sit though.” he said No period use a coma.

sighing as all his body weight was taken off his feet -- Maybe expand on why he was sighing? Was he relieved, happy, annoyed? He most likely isn't annoyed but I figured I'd giev you three emotions there.

He stared at Kylie, waiting for her answer -- No coma.

Now Hazel's part:

Taylor asked, nudging her arm with her elbow This kind of confused me. I'd probably change the first her to Hazel just so it's clear.

This may have been a typo but I figured I'd point it out anyways feeling to well Too is the correct form here.

I actually kind of like Taylor. She's annoying but at the same time she has this energy about her. I don't blame Hazel for kicking her to the curb though.

Now back to Forest's real quick.

“Five bucks its girly shit.” This made me laugh. Shadow has this air about him. He doesn't act as if he knows EVERYTHING but he kind of gives off this feeling that he knows more than the average person.

Anyways I really liked this chapter. It's opening up the story nicely.

Alright. Prolgue:

It's a good start to what is to come. It explains what's going on with Forest and Hazel.

I especially liked it when Shadow said And you're a fag, don't see me holding you back from expressing yourself." It cut into what his personality is like.

In the beginning you have glare off of the bottles and trash the scattered the living room I'm assuming that the the after trash is meant to be that is.

Next you have And this, is where Shadow comes in. You don't need the coma here.

I remember the first time I started reading this, this confused me. a difficult thing to pull off with no money and dark black hair Maybe switch it to naturual dark black hair.

The last thing for Forest's part. Who insisted that he dye his own hair blue....... You don't need all those periods. Three will do. This is just me being nitpicky.

Now Hazel's part.

She sighed and tried to drift back to sleep,since when she looked at her cell phone it read nine in the morning. The since part just kind of irkes me for some reason. I feel like it might flow better if you had it go after she looked at her cell phone and it read nine in the morning.

A lot of people do this. And it's not really a big deal but... "Hey everyone." she stated Instead of the period you want a coma.

Like I said. So far so good. It opens up the story and you don't know exactly what you're going to get.

Oh wow Shadow cried multiple times.
And is somehow real. Am feeling kinda sorry for the Avenged boys but also pissed at them for basically doing that to Forest.
Love this update and have this strange feeling whenever I think about the fight for the body coming. I now truly have no idea who I want to win because it used to be Forest completely but now that Shadow is not being an asshole all the time and is CRYING there is part of me that want him to win.
Cannot wait for the next part. Hmm maybe someone bitch slaps Hayzel for being such a dick. Such a spoiled dick.

Uhm wow. Shadows is real.? Uhm damn I have no words. Speechless it was really good tho (:

I've just read my last two comments and you seen to be good at making my day.
Go you.

Shit yes. Who got a mention. I did. You have officially made my crappy day so much better.
So OHMYGOD.
I am loving the angsting. Maybe a happy ending at the end if their will be no sequel but keep up the angst for now.
Make him as angry as you want then make him angrier.
Loved the update. Have kinda missed Forest what with all the Shadow and Hazel and it's good to have him back. Love the line
'“SUCKER PUNCH THAT MOTHERFUCKING MIDGET!!” Shadow screamed."
Made me crack up.
Now I have to go sleep(by sleep I mean drink relentless then stay up for another 2-3 hours reading slash, nit even bothering to think about school tomorow.) so all of my love is once again flying to you for updating.
I will also proudly admit that when I saw an update for this i squealed. Really loud.

All of my freaking love is flying at you right now. Like all of it. You have made my day. Literally. This update is amazing and perfect and I just love it do much.
I did notice shadow was the only one In first person but I didnt know if it was intentional of just a habit you got into when writing his POV.
Argh they made contact but it wasn't Forest. That was like yay but then at the same time I was like dam.
I still have this uber love for shadow and just everything about him, especially now that he has accepted all the stuff to do with being connected and stuck with Forest to an extent.
Oh my god I swear every comment I make on this story is like twice the size of any other one on another fic.

I'm so excited about this sequel! I'm loving it so far!! Can't wait to read more!

That is sucky, not being able to preview your chapters but they are very much super good.
I also love shadow the line about being an insane manic had me laughing hard. I really like how Forest is still letting Shadow out to deal with some things and that they now get along much more than they did. Can't wait for Hazel and the guys next bit now they know where Forest is.

Ohh tornados dont sound good and am glad you are okay, also i got mentioned, go me. love the "He was smart enough to know that we were dumb enough" i love idiots logic or as it is now called in my brain, Jimmy logic. Love the update and you are really cranking them out fast girl. Now i wanna know who Forests douch roommate is. Hmm i do love a mystery though.

Argh how are you so good at writing. I love this so so much and the last line killed me. Feel kinda sorry for Hazel too as it seems like her friends are just her friends to get to her dad and that. It would suck majorly to have friends like that but I am glad that Forest has found himself some good friends and has realised the value of them. Am so looking forward to the reunion and also wondering if the guys just kinda gave up searching for Forest and accepted that he wad gone. So much love being sent your way right now for this amazing update.

This is really interesting. I love how it's written from both perspectives. It's certainly interesting and I like how you distinguish between each of the story tellers. It's definitely a twist from the regular one gets one chapter and the other gets the next, I actually like it better this way. Anyways, it's really good and you should totally keep up the good work!

Oh my god yay sequel. I love it already and especially love how it is split so you can see whats happening in both their lives. Love the personal alarm clock thing and am glad that Shadow is nice now and that Forest is all okay, well kinda, and not like dead somewhere. Also love that the guys are still in it and am hoping for reunions soon, messy or otherwise.

I love this. Seriously. And to the commenter before me: It's meant as he dyed his hair light brown, when he had dark black before, which was difficult to do with little money and going from dark to lighter hair. Er....Right? xD

So Zacky got his head out of his ass it seems. And i'm confused. You said "his hair was a light brown" and following that is "a difficult thing to pull off with no money and dark black hair." What color is Forest's hair?

Can't wait for the first chapter ^___^