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  • ToxxxicKissPrincess

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    Such a great writer! I can't wait until the next chapter! :D
    June 9th, 2012 at 05:30pm
  • LastChance.

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    Sorry ignore my two previous comments it kept posting before i had finished the comment so i had to do it again and again.

    Anyway at first i was a bit unsure on whether i was going to enjoy your story but as soon as i got half way through i got intrigued and couldnt wait to read the next chapter. Damon seems like such a lovely sweet character which is refreshing since most boys in stories are portrayed as jerks.

    Also you actually have a beginning to your story, whereas most people just jump straight into the action, so you can actually get a feel for Damon before the action starts.

    I hope you keep writing as i am excited to see what happens.
    June 9th, 2012 at 05:24pm
  • little motorkitty;

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    I really like this, for a first story it's written really well and seems really interesting. A lot of people's first stories can be filled with grammar and spelling mistakes and cliches, so it's really refreshing to read something really good.

    Damon seems like a really cool character, and I love his interaction with his puppy, I love pets in stories and how characters act around them is normally a good way to show the real parts of a character that you might not be able to write in otherwise, if you follow me xD But yeah, this seems like a really good story, so well done!
    June 9th, 2012 at 05:17pm
  • LastChance.

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    Hey, i was a bit unsure at first but the story is really starting to grow on me, i like the way you write and how you dont go straight into the action, i cant wait to find out more!
    June 9th, 2012 at 05:15pm
  • LastChance.

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    Hey i like this, i was a bit unsure at the start but its growing on me and im eager to know more!
    June 9th, 2012 at 05:12pm
  • drivingbackwards

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    oh! i love the way you write c: i think it's because it reminds me of the way i like to write. i don't know if damon is supposed to be an original character or what, but i like it nonetheless. oh, and the puppy- adorable. people always forget that pets are common, and a wonderful source of happiness. i really enjoyed reading it, even if there are only two chapters.
    June 9th, 2012 at 03:16pm
  • Puddin?

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    I really love your first two chapters, it seems to me that you have sat down and really thought about this story, it's direction and your plot. I have really enjoyed reading these first two chapters, you have laid out your story very well and your grammar and spelling have no faults! I can't believe that you wrote this so early in the morning, I cant write like that with half a jar of coffee in me! I can't help but wonder what the dogs name is... I started to think it might just be baby but then I realised that might be a little too obvious, so I cannot wait to see what he names her...x
    June 9th, 2012 at 03:16pm
  • Before 1975;

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    This is a really good story. I enjoyed reading it, and I found the plot to be very interesting. You have a very beautiful writing style. Your grammar and spelling are fine. The characters are quite interesting. Everything seems to check out so, hats off to you. ^.^
    June 8th, 2012 at 07:24am
  • kristinvengeance

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    and by first couple i mean i read the two chapters ahahaha! still, really enjoyed it :)
    June 8th, 2012 at 04:38am
  • kristinvengeance

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    Very good story, I read the first couple of chapters and it is very well written. It is hard, sometimes, to successfully captivate readers with nothing but the opening paragraph but I have to admit that you did very well in that respect. Keep up the great work, it is very well done!
    June 8th, 2012 at 04:38am
  • diamandis.

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    aw, that was cuuuuute. :D
    great chapter!
    June 8th, 2012 at 02:52am
  • diamandis.

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    YOU'RE WINNING. I love it, I love it, I love it. c:
    June 6th, 2012 at 07:46am
  • lumosmancer

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    hang on, this comment is better, ignore my othe rone, lol sorry! That was amazing, i can’t believe you wrote that at half 2 in the morning, i can’t write that well if i wrote that at midday! The story line seems good but maybe you could have more dialogue in it? I wonder what the blonde girl will do, is she even stupid? Keep it up and update soon!
    June 5th, 2012 at 05:57pm
  • lumosmancer

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    Wow, that's a great first chapter! You wrote that at 2:30 in the morning? I couldn't write something like that being wide awake in the day! Update soon!:) Wow
    June 5th, 2012 at 02:58pm
  • LovelsLove

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    This is really good so far. :) I especially liked the puppy. ^^ I'm wondering: is she just a dumb blonde? Update soon? Pleaseee? :3 Okay- thankies. :D. Have a fantastic day.
    June 5th, 2012 at 08:47am
  • Ashton Irwin;;

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    OMG I LOVE DAMON
    June 3rd, 2012 at 11:39am