The Genius - Comments

Not being able to talk has always been interesting to me. In some of my own stories, my character can't talk. So let's just say I really, really like the story in this aspect. In chapter one the move of POVs is very confusing. I have no idea who this person is at first. But other than that the first chapter is absolutely beautiful. Keep writing, and I will keep reading

Not being able to talk has always been interesting to me. In some of my own stories, my character can't talk. So let's just say I really, really like the story in this aspect. In chapter one the move of POVs is very confusing. I have no idea who this person is at first. But other than that the first chapter is absolutely beautiful. Keep writing, and I will keep reading

As others have said this is a concept very different from the one's you see every day unlike as you said insomnia and eating disorders. I think that so far so good. You might want to introduce your characters a little better because the two point of views in chapter one had me a little lost on who these other people were and how they related to the story. All in all though I think you've gotten off to a wonderful start and I look forward to seeing how your story turns out (:

Very interesting concept. I haven't run into many stories that explore a character who is unable to talk. As you covered in your Prologue, thing's like Insomnia and Eating Disorders are popular subjects for stories. You have a great beginning! Awesome work!

Great start so far! It's a very easy read, and you have a great main character on your hands. Using the first person POV offers a great look inside Kaetio's ordeal, and how she handles herself daily. My only question is why they have such bizarre but interesting names? Do tell!

First of all, your background choices are really confusing to me and they do not line up well with the page but I think that's just me being nit-picky. I'm not sure how to pronounce the name Kaetio. Is it Kay-tee-oh? This seems like a different plot than I am used to seeing on Mibba so I wish you good luck with this promising story!

So I love the empathy I can build with Kaetio's situation and how she handles it. :3 I love that even though it's something that really brings her down, she is able to learn with it. It makes her strong. I love Sage and how compatible they are! <3 <3 He is definitely a cutie and a bit flirty. ;D The one thing I would suggest is putting some sort of pronunciation for their names so I know how to say them? I feel the names are a bit TOO exotic. Its hard to meet someone with such a unique name, let alone 5 of them in one state, you know? Other than that, the writing was phenomenal, the characters are definitely dimensional and I can't wait for more! :D

This is a really original idea! Your plot is good so far, and I can't find any inconsistent characterizations either. The scene with the dream in it really put me on edge; good job! The only problems I could find were some typos, quite a few run-on sentences, and some awkward wording. I think if you would just reread thoroughly and maybe run your chapters through some sort of spell-check, this would be awesome!

First off, I think you've got a really great idea here. It's very unique and I've yet to read anything like it before here on Mibba. So I commend you on that. And the chapter with the dream in it - really creepy. You're good at writing creepy things. :D The only thing that I could recommend is that you proofread a bit more. As I was reading, I found quite a few mistakes. They're just minor typos and things that have been overlooked, and they can be very easily fixed. But overall, I really enjoyed this. Keep it up! :)

wow, this is really good. i was really enjoying the nice hospital bit when that dream/whatever happened. i was so shocked! it's good though. there are a couple of grammatical errors, but they look like just little typos, and we're all guilty of a few of those.

really great otherwise! <3

This story is good so far. Scary when it came to the second hater but nonetheless, this was great! I'm glad comment swap brought me to this. I didn't find much grammatical errors or typos, and the layout is simple. It was hard, though, to read the cursive but nothing to bad. Immediate subscribe! Keep up the good work! :)

When I first saw the title of this story I suspected it would have an interesting concept and it does.
I haven't read a story like this before and it's interesting to see the perspective of someone who is mute. It must be lonely, being around people but being unable to communicate with them the way most people do. Not everyone has the patience or capacity to communicate with someone who speaks (or doesn't) in a way that's different than they do.
I will admit that the second chapter was a bit confusing to read because I'm not entirely sure how it connects to the story yet. Also, I am rarely bothered by things I read because I read a lot of dystopian novels that are graphic to say the least, but the dream sequence actually creeped me out a bit. I guess any time I read or see something in a movie that involves hurting a baby it sticks in my mind for a bit. Nevertheless, this was well written and I will be subscribing!

I really liked this. The characters are very real and the first chapter is really haunting. I'm definitely subscribing to this. I'm really interested now. I love the way you write and how well you write action. it's so hard to write action because things happen so fast it's hard to slow them down to make them seem realistic. You've done a really good job. I think it's really great and I can't wait to read more.

I love the way you give your readers such personal insights into mind your character, really explaining the pains of living without words. This is a really beautiful story, and I love how desperately your character wishes she could speak. Her struggle makes this story so interesting, and honestly, it's refreshing to read about a character struggling through something other than addiction or anorexia. Hats off to you! :)

I really enjoyed the definitions, as others have said. It was a nice intro. One thing I'm a little curious about is how she became mute at four. Could she speak before then? Did she just wake up one day and could no longer speak? Of course, none of that is really expected to be explained in the prologue, it's just what I was wondering about. Definitely stick with it! :)

I loved the definitions at the start. It created a clever effect to the story. And the ending of the prologue made me feel so sorry for the girl. The last line has loads of emotion behind it. Also, I find myself adoring the plotline. I'm not too keen on the story layout I know someone who can make beautiful layouts, if you're interested. Hope I've helped, this story is very interesting.

I liked the introduction at the beginning, the story is very well thought out so far and I can’t wait to see where you take it. For the character I can’t wait to see what happens to her, and what happens in general. It’s a really good story so far!

This story is good so far. I like the summary, especially the bit about the doctor. What he said is so realistic! I've heard a doctor say that myself, and it is so inconsiderate. I like, though, that the character latched onto it literally.

The first chapter is interesting. I'm curious to discover the reason behind her muteness. I'm also curious to see how the genius ends up to be! Good writing so far, and I think you have a good idea!

I like this story so far. Though it's only a prologue right now, I find that it holds a lot of emotion. Already we can feel the person's (I never did see a name =/) feelings and we know how detached they feel.

I think the only thing I disliked was the repeat of the word ‘genius’ so many times over. I do understand the importance of it, but I think it would sound better to use replacement words. Maybe like ‘mastermind’.

But it’s a really good start! Update soon! <3

Nothing much yet to comment. For the prologue it's good but there isn't anything that gives off the feeling of completeness apart from the beginning plot which is brought out really well. I just hope that it will get more complex.
The usage of words is good, the sentences are good, the flow is good. Everything seems good about this but nothing spectacular that would keep me reading right now. The writing style doesn't seem that fixed but that comes with time :D
But the main character is brought out really well and I can already feel her personality. I just hope all my hunches are right because you never know ^^