The Gemini - Comments

This is really good. Personally, I don't read Doctor Who stories as I'm not a huge fan of the show, but I like the way you portray The Doctor and the storyline in general. I think I have a secret love for historical stories, so the part in 1959 was amazing, no matter how short it was.

I think you should definitely update this story, it's a really good read :)

Hey :)
So i love Doctor Who anyway, but this is really good! You have a great writing style, though i only wish you could be a little more descriptive. But other than that, it's great. So keep up the good work! :D

Omg!!! Love it!

I love Dr. Who. I like this story. It's different. Yes, I get confused very easily in this but it is interesting. Update soon(:

Hi! Well immediately when you mention Nicholas Flamel and Doctor Who, the story is an absolute win! One thing that I would maybe, possibly change is the layout. It’s kind of difficult to read because it’s so “IN YOUR FACE” HAHA but anyway, it’s a great story with a great plot and a great crossover. I do think that if you made the chapters a little bit longer, you would maybe give your story more detailing and then it would be even more awesome. Keep on writin’ dude!

I've read the first book of the Nicholas Flamel series and I loved it. I also happen to love Doctor Who. It's a very interesting crossover.

I would also just add more to your chapters, perhaps making an outline of what is to happen in each would help (I know it helps me with my writing). Also, try to make a layout that is easier on the eyes. I'm not very fond of the faded photo in the background. Perhaps make it so it appears above the title?

Keep writing!

I enjoyed this, I know next to nothing about the fandom but every time it comes up on BBC I end up watching it because it's so entertaining. Like others have mentioned before, the chapters are a bit short. I think you could do with beefing them up a little, because sometimes you jump from on topic to the next I have to read through it twice before I understand what is going on.

But other than that, it's really nicely written thus far.

This is a very interesting story and you seem to have good ideas for it. I have very little background knowledge on the topic, but it wasn't hard for me to keep up. You have no grammatical errors, and that's a huge plus when it comes to writing.(: the chapters are a little short, and the overall story is a bit fast paced, but it's a good story!

I gotta say, this sounds pretty interesting. I like that the chapters are short because it keeps me wanting more and as far as I could tell there are no grammatical errors. You should get a new layout though because a layout is like a book cover and people might pass this amazing story over because of that. I don't want that to happen.

Your plot looks really promising but the layout takes away from the story. The chapter's are also a little short and the whole thing moved a little fast. But if you fix up these little things this could be fantastic! :)

I'm so sorry, but comment swap brought me here, and I just don't know anything about Doctor Who, so there really isn't much I can say about your story :( Although, I can say that your layout makes for nearly impossible reading! Haha. From what I could read, your fic seems to move a little fast. If you have any questions about your writing, feel free to ask!

Comment swap ftw! Just to start off, it's kind of hard to read with the layout. Maybe trying darkening the story background a bit, ya? It's all in all a good story line, but sometimes it's hard to follow because it goes too fast so maybe try adding some more details. But other than that I generally enjoyed it. Doctor Who is the shit.

hi :) so far, i enjoy your story quite a bit =D i have never heard of either doctor who or the other one, but i enjoy it :) it was slightly difficult to read, because of the layout, but everything else seemed good =D angles now kinda scare me cause of this though o.o keep writing!

Hey :D I really love this story, but I feel that the layout gets in the way; the picture is distracting and does make it hard to read in places. I think you could do with adding a few more commas in places, too, but other than those points, I really enjoy this :D

I absolutely adore Doctor Who. It's perfect! But, the layout, however, isn't. It's very distracting and I can't really read certain parts of the story. I couldn't read the summary very well...

I love how you described the Doctor in the story. And the hate for One Direction? Boo! haha. Only kidding, but I do love them. And the obliviousness in the Doctor? So true it's not even funny. I like the twins. They're pretty cool.

But the daleks and weeping angels staring at me as I try to read? Not so much, haha. At least I couldn't close my eyes!

I really like the story, and I want to see more chapters up, seeing as it only has four, but yes, anyways, I like the layout, but I'm confused about it..their are only two or three pictures of twins, and then a random guy. Is that their boss Mr. The John Smith?? (; anyways, I really do like the story and i want to see a lot more of it!!!!!

Well what I first thought when I read this story, I too noticed the lack of a layout that the story had, but none the less its not the layout that should matter its the story itself that should matter the most.I at first didn't understand what it was really about until I saw it was about Dr.Who, a show that I don't really know anything about, but I thought it was pretty well written and I liked the story line all together.Keep up the good work :)

Honestly, first thing I noticed was lack of layout. Layouts are really helpful in getting the readers' attention. Like the comment below mine said, I'd really suggest putting "Dr Who" in the intro or something as to indicate what area of fandom this is coming from. For me, I had no clue what was going on till the second chapter.

I'm not too big on Doctor Who, my dad is, but I don't really watch and I had no idea what fandom this was until the second chapter where they mentioned 'The Doctor' then everything else clicked. I would suggest mentioning the fandom or something that would be a clear cut giveaway as to who the story is about, but otherwise it is good so far, keep going :)

I'm not very familiar with the Doctor Who fandom, but this is pretty good. It took me a little while to figure out what was going on, but the storyline isn't that hard to follow. Although, I agree with the idea of making your introduction a little more "snazzy".

-Jess xx