We Owned the Night - Comments

At first, I wasn't quite sure that I would like this. But after reading, I'm hooked. I really can't wait for more. I absolutely love your writing style and lack of grammatical errors. I'm definitely subscribing.

I didn't think I would like this at first, but now I'm pretty engrossed. I want to figure out who Matt is, and what's up with Bianca and the main character. This is very well written and has just the right amount of detail.

I like that this is a true story. I also like that that makes it so realistic and beautiful. I want to root for Bianca though, just because she's in the start of what could be a very dangerous and harmful relationship. As for Erica, I haven't really figured out why the main character really seems to dislike her so much.

I really enjoyed this, and your word choices flowed quite nicely. All in all, this was a nice read. :)

I've commented on this already, so:
Comment swap brought me here. Fucking God, it's amazing. I read the summary and was like, "I don't think I'll like this." But as I read I found myself enthralled in your wonderful way of words, they basically rolled off the page and into my mind. It was wonderful. I want to read more, but you haven't posed anymore than two.

I've commented on this already, so:
Comment swap brought me here. Fucking God, it's amazing. I read the summary and was like, "I don't think I'll like this." But as I read I found myself enthralled in your wonderful way of words, they basically rolled off the page and into my mind. It was wonderful. I want to read more, but you haven't posed anymore than two.

Comment swap brought me here. Fucking God, it's amazing. I read the summary and was like, "I don't think I'll like this." But as I read I found myself enthralled in your wonderful way of words, they basically rolled off the page and into my mind. It was wonderful. I want to read more, but you haven't posed anymore than two.

Great first chapter! I love the description of Matt and how you just leapt into the action. My suggestion is to make the summary of your story a summary instead of a flash forward. A suggestion I would make is to move what you have for the summary right now to the beginning of chapter one and once it starts repeating fade out since the audience already knows what will happen. But regardless, writing about your life is awesome and brave and I commend you for it!

I like this (: I love the little cliff hanger, something I tend to as wellxD Hmm... You have a few grammar mistakes but that's an easy fix. I love the way you kinda just jumped right into the story, it's a lot better then... I woke up, the sunlight in my eyes... that just kind of boring. I think I might subscribe (: Keep the good work up and update as soon as possible

The summary should be a little more about the story. Just reading some italics from the first chapter completely threw me off and confused the hell outta me! the fact that you're trying to retell this story to your daughter should be a little more obvious or continue the story as is, but talk to "us" more. Besides that I think it's great your writing about your own experiences.

This is interesting. The summary made me curious of what was going on. I would like to have some descriptions though just so I can better see what people look like in my head. :)

Good so far, keep it up.

I think this is really interesting! I love reading true stories and I'm sure no one would even think of judging you.

I also agree with the other two comments- descriptions would be nice. Maybe stuff like Matt's hair color, eye color, etc.

Keep going with it, this looks cool :)

Descriptions and such, yes would be lovely. I like the name Bianca. Keep u[p the good work!

This is really good so far. One thing I would say is that there is a lack of description. Perhaps adding character appearances and an idea of the location would be something to try delving into with your writing… But otherwise, I really like this so far, and I can't wait for more of your story :)v