Long Live Us - Comments

Oh my lord, I love this! x) I've listened to my fair share of ATL songs, but I'd never really gotten too much into the band itself. Glad to have read this, though! 8)

I enjoyed very much the humor and lightness about their relationship, with that realistic touch of perversion that is inevitable between real couples - a factor that I've noticed can easily be overdone, or completely overlooked. Hmm; but I loved very much the way you've done it. :)

You've gotta love Chinese food. I can't say much about the alcohol or horror movies, but Chinese food, is a gift.

I love your writing, and must say I really enjoyed reading this chapter. You seriously have to update! I loved this.

Molly

I like it because you dont know the pov it leaves a little mystery

What she said below. I did not quite understand who's POV was it, but I enjoyed reading it. This story seems to be getting off to a good start so far. I don't normally read this stuff as well but this seems promising. Keep up the great work.

I'm a little confused. Who's POV in this chapter in? I know I probably sound like a goober, but the summry mentioned an Ella and an Aurora, but the chapter didn't mention them at all…

But confusion aside, I really liked this. The relationship Jack Barakat and this chick have is really cute. It makes me giggle. But I'm a visual person, and since I'm not an ATL fan, I don't know who Jack Barakat is and I can't visualize him. It would maybe be helpful to put up a picture or something for non-ATL fans who are thrown your way. It's just a suggestion though, as your story would be perfectly fine without it.

By the way, I'm sorry if random words show up in this comment…I'm typing this on my Kindle and the autocorrect is just awful.

Automatically I was super pumped to read because I am an All Time Low fic writer myself, so I was pretty excited to read this in the first place. Also, awesome thing for mentioning the pink hair! (I love his pink hair, but irrelevant.) You're writing is great, by the way, so that helped draw me in too. The relationship with Jack and the main character is adorable, and that helps the reader paint a better picture :) Great story you have so far and keep up the good work! :)

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