I think you have a good concept for this story and it has the potential to be really good. I think you could go about describing things a little better. Instead of saying she is 5'2" maybe describe how she is so short she can't reach the top of her locker. When you're writing a good rule of them is: "Show don't tell" It will make your story and writing a lot more interesting. I hope this advice helps!
June 20th, 2012 at 07:36pm