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I have so many conflicting feelings because Corey is letting his fabulous show but Brandon's a dick and the last two paragraphs made me want to cry

Chapter fourteen
“Nice little lie about the Facebook page, Matt, considering that was my project.” I goddamn knew it.

Really clever plot twist eep. Brandon is such an ass wipe. I want more. Please give me more. It is your fault I want more in the first place.

Chapter thirteen
OH. MY. FUCKING. GOD. WTF.

***incoherence***

What? What? WHAT?

I don't even know how to process this right now. How could you do this to me...I love Corey so much now.

It must be so traumatising as a mother to have to ask your children those questions. And it must be so traumatising to answer them. I think I would actually die.

I can't even right now.

Chapter twelve
I GODDAMN KNEW MATT WOULD TOP -squeals-

I have no words for this chapter, okay? So I am just going to move on before I start flailing or something.

Chapter ten
The way I just wanted Brandon to out Matt (I AM SUCH A HORRIBLE PERSON) BUT I ALSO WANTED DANIEL AND MATT TO KISS. I AM SO CONFLICTED.

The powers of the rainbow have made me impervious to attractive females. You have such a clever mind. Oh my goodness.

COREY AND MATT SNUGGLE TIME ahem

Chapter 11
I love Matt's mom. I want to keep her as my own.

(there is this Corey/Matt/Daniel love triangle in my mind - don't ruin it for me)

Corey looks bored and has his arrogant swag on again and Daniel looks like he should be in a hair commercial ad. Nom them both. Nom nom. Why is that so hot??

Lol to the hipster reference. That pretty much made my day.

“I’d rather fuck a skunk.” So. Freaking. Witty. ngf. I love this dude. Why do you make me love him?!

My heart flipped and freaked out when they kissed; that was so hot and lovely and magnificent and I'm running out of adjectives but you get the point.

I WANT MATT TO GET LAID TONIGHT TOO

Chapter nine
I have taken to assuming everyone is gay until proven straight, m'kay?

DANIEL. AND MATT. AND BRANDON. RUNS TO NEXT CHAPTER >>

(oh, I wanna see Matt top )

Chapter eight
“Oh my god, I was going to ask you the same thing! Have you seen how perfectly spaced your freckles are? It’s amazing!” OMG. OMG. YES.

WE HAVEN'T PRACTICED TODAY OMFG. YES.

I would tell you what I liked about this, but I'd just quote the entire chapter sooo. Nom. The awkwardness of the kiss --

Chapter seven
straight vampire decides he wants to fuck gay human...better than porn. THIS. So much. Omg this kid kills me. He's so freaking endearing

COREY STOP PRETENDING YOU AREN'T A FAG. WE WILL STILL LOVE YOU. MATT WILL MOST LIKELY LOVE YOU EVEN MORE.

Oh shit. Mommy. Please blow it omg. I want Corey to know ngf.

Chapter six
Sex is not as fucking great as food I love this guy. I love him. I don't care if he is gay.

Corey is a sneaky little shit! AND YET I STILL LIKE HIM. STOP IT.

That kissing scene was so hot omg. I can't even. -flails- I WANT TO KNOW WHAT HAPPENS.

Gah.

Brandon is a bitch!
Can't wait for the next update :)

Chapter five
Okay, so I kind of feel like crap for being so irritated with Matt, because I totally love him and understand his predicament okay?!

“And I actually liked it so I kept going afterwards.” This is why love him okay. He is not a bad person and he is totally fabulous. Yep.

“I can’t even have a friend over" YES COREY HE IS YOUR FRIEND. MAKE HIM YOUR BOYFRIEND kthnxbai.

OMG Corey. I have such feels for you now. Wth.

AND THEN THE KISSING. THE KISSING. Kiss him dammmmmit.

But we’ll have to practice this more, right?

Okay, I lied. I'm reading it now quick before I have to leave.

Chapter four
If Corey isn't gay I have no idea what I'm doing with my life...

“And stand closer to Corey please. You two are more frigid than a freezer.” lols.

I actually really do like Corey's brashness There is something so wrong with me I don't even know. Hell, Lesbo, this material is crap." So rude but I don't want him to leave. Whyyy.

I can imagine them rehearsing the lines and it's all awkward and then Corey gets really into it... My brain. Ack.

Corey, I had no idea how good you’d be at this.” Corey rolls his eyes, but unless I’m mistaken, his cheeks are tinged in the lightest of pinks. YES. I KNEW IT. DON'T EVEN LIE TO ME. THIS IS EVIDENCE.

I like it. I like it. I like it.

I'm sorry for quoting the hell out of you, by the way, but wow.

I wasn't going to do this all review-style, but I don't want to forget anything, so here goes:

Layout
Absolutely lovely; simple and I can read every word. I also love it when the banner/picture/whatever ties in with the story or title, so that's extra kudos there. I'm never brave enough to have brightly-coloured backgrounds but I love yours.

Title and Summary
Love the title. LOVE it. I adore vague, open-to-interpretation titles that end up making total sense once you've finished the story. So yes, I loved it.

I know you said you want to change the summary, but I think it's perfect. Personal opinion, of course, but it isn't one of those "describe everything that's going to happen in the story in five lines or less" summaries. I appreciate that. I prefer concise to over-zealous.

Spelling and Grammar
No typos, good word flow. It's not really one of the things that bother me all too much (unless it just is too much)

General Plotline
Chapter one
Great introductory paragraph. You place the reader right in the action. The inner dialogue held my curiosity long enough to pique my interest. Bam, you've got me

I know a lot of people don't like this, but I really do like that you introduced your characters (and their personalities) straight away. I don't want to hear about a 'mysterious boy' for two chapters before he is finally revealed. I'm all about instant gratification.

Daniel seems like an asshole, yet I kind of like him? I don't know yet. I love how nonchalant Matt. Just so...likeable, but not too likeable that you've made a Mary Sue out of him (whats the male version? Ack.)

Oh, and like, what? And suddenly I’m on the ground, winded as the fire-hose blasts water at me at maximum pressure.

I hate cliffhangers. I love cliffhangers. Darn.

Chapter two
I hear him whisper into his ear, “little shits like you are the reason my brother hung himself.” That was the saddest line I have ever read. My heart is in my throat. -sobs-

I just. I really like stories like this, okay? The real-life aspect of it is so much more realistic than some band fic (I'm shooting myself in the foot for saying this gah). And slash has a special place in my heart when the guys aren't (like you said in your comment) portrayed as girl - even Patrick, because he adds a comedic element to story. That makes me really happy.

I was so sickened when Corey said We were just supposed to get them, you know but I love the added dimension of Matt not revealing his sexuality. It adds depth to his character, even though I hate it.

I AM SO EXCITED. I want to know what Daniel has on Matt

The last, like, three paragraphs got me weirdly on edge. I need to know. I need to know. Corey and Matt???

Chapter three
Gah. I liked Corey for about three seconds an then he's an ass again. Why do I like him at all?!

“And then we’ll have Patrick as our transgendered person struggling with societal gender confines.” lol'ed out loud. Omg. I love him!

Lara is a devious little shit. I adore her.

The entire scene with Corey defending Matt against Patrick really irked me. Matt is starting to get on my nerves. I want him to stand up for himself and his friends. I guess I just have to be patient...-sighs-

IT'S REVEALED. Yay.

Okay. Sorry for the long-ass comment. I'll read and comment on the rest later. I LIKE IT SO MUCH.

I totally missed a couple of updates so when I saw that this story was on chapter fourteen I was like wait a second before gasping and realising that I now have all these chapters to read which made me sort of excited, haha. :D

I think it's so adorable the relationship he has with his mom and so refreshing to see someone so honest with their parents. And so awesome that she just gets it and doesn't judge him and their entire relationship makes me want to hug the fuck out of your story because it's just so awesome and I love it. She's not trying to hard to be a cool mom but she gets it.

And OH MY GOD HAVE I MISSED MATT AND ALL HIS LITTLE WORRYINGS AND THOUGHTS AND WORDS INSIDE HIS HEAD AND EVERYTHING. He calls himself a loser. Because he is just that awesome. I actually laughed when he called Daniel disgustingly attractive. xD
But aww, his little panic attack just made me want to hug him. I can totally relate to having that crushing feeling like everything is just suffocating you so I just want to comfort him and tell him it'll be alright. :c

Aw, DID I MENTION HOW ADORABLE IT WAS FOR MATT TO READ TO HIM GOODNIGHT? I was just reminded reading this and that is seriously just the cutest thing I read it and I'm like stop it, stop it or I will throw up from how adorable you are. And the kiss, gah~! I call progress and Corey getting all red-faced, haha. :D
You know, I like Daniel sort of as a dude but nu uh, no one gets between Matt and Corey, no one. If you're just going to cause problems Daniel you can leave. xD

Oh my god them kissing again THEY CLEARLY CANNOT KEEP THEIR HANDS OFF OF EACH OTHER so clearly it is meant to be, haha.

I KNEW IT. I KNEW BRANDON HAD SOMETHING MORE UP HIS SLEEVE THEN HE LET ON. But aw, oh my god disappointment I was so excited that Corey and Matt finally got together. AWESOME PLOT TWIST but aw :c no Corey/Matt lovin' like I was excited for. I totally knew that Brandon was going to be super important and I am so gah what if he tells Corey and Corey freaks out AH SO MANY PROBLEMS.

Haha, I totally laughed at the and Corey managed to kick ass because he's awful and I hate him. Matt may just be my spirit animal. xD

Aww, again, heart breaking with the Matt and the crying, poor baby don't cry. I just want everything to be wonderful for him, aw. I WILL HUG YOU. I WILL HUG YOU UNTIL EVERYTHING IS OKAY AGAIN. <3

HAHA OH MY GOD clearly wasn't that good, Matt. You go Matt. You go do your thing. Fuck you, Brandon. xD
I love how sarcastic he is all the time, haha.
Ah oh my god no Brandon needs to go as well because I am having none of his bullshit, he is just so rude and unnecessary and ugh, no. He is just ruining things. And I know it's because of plot and whatnot but UGH BRANDON I DISLIKE YOU IMMENSELY. SO IMMENSE. :c

Totally called the facebook thing though, hahaha.

But oh my god love this story so much, everything about it, I hope Matt is alright. <3

Another! Poor jake:(

I KNEW IT! I KNEW IT. HE CLOSETED HE KNOW
when i twigged what brandon was doing (around about the point where matt was like hell no, no more sex for you) i legitimately said 'no' and my legs dropped onto the floor and it was just this moment of sadness

also, "You left early on Sunday."
"Yeah, well, you were making me sick."
best. comeback. ever.

this story is great, like, honestly i love it. keep on rocking. i love it a whole fucking lot

Well, I definitely don't like Brandons today. The Brandon in your story is a major dick, and my friend Brandon is a major flake.

I was going to go to bed, but then I didn't. And I read this instead. I really don't regret it. :D

OH.
MY.
GOD.
SDKLJDSFKLDFXKJKJL
KSDJFSKFHSKDJHSKFeoisugfs
BRANDON IS SUCH A MANIPULATIVE LITTLE BITCH
AKSDJLSKF I'M GOING TO STAB HIM
WITH
MY PEN
RIGHT IN HIS EYE
BECAUSE
HE IS RUINING MATT + COREY
AND THAT IS JUST NOT OKAY.

on a happier note, i was really excited when i got a notification for this ^.^