So, Long Live Us - Comments

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Loving it!(:

SO CUTE

YOU'RE A PERFECT PERSON

Aww poor Maddison :( I really like this story! :) Please update soon!

HOLY CRAP. I LOVE THIS. DAMMIT ALEX. IF THIS STORY WAS OVER, I'D KILL THE BITCH. UPDATE SOONNNNN!

yeah Alex feels like shit. Good, and I hope he dumps Lisa fat slutty ass.

You should write me in so I can kill Lisa, I don't mind if you send me to prison, just as long Lisa is dead. and for Alex, Ithink he needs to grow the fuck up and stop acting like a stupid little bitch. she should be happy with Jordan, he's just amazing.

I love how fast you update!!!! This was quite a chapter. So Alex is jealous! He kind of deserves to be! Update soon!

This is cute. I'm not a big fan of ATL, but this wasn't bad for my first ATL fic! You include a lot of description you could probably weave into telling as they story moves along, but this has some pretty intense potential nonetheless (not to mention I really love the simplicity of your layout). Good work, and good luck with the rest! :)

She should just be with Jordan, not Alex! I love Alex, don't get me wrong but I think Jordan and her are so cute :-)

I kinda want this to turn in to a Jordan Eckes story but I know it's not, but can you not break his heart just find him a new girl that Maddie wants him to be with... But wait in till more drama has gone.

I know all I'm doing is how to write your story so sorry, I just really like your story hehe sorry, I hope you update soon and keep up the AMAZING work.

please update

You have a talent for writing but as someone who isnt an All Time Low fan, there were parts that confused me. I found it hard to keep reading but this was mostly due to it being kinda long. I always lose interest close to the 5th chapter. So that's more my problem than yours ha. Overall, I thought it was cute. Good job! :]

Awww Maddison and Jordan! What's Alex thinking? Can't wait to see how things play out! Update soon!

UPDATE!

From the almighty comment swap i come.

This is a good story, but sometimes when you get into the writing itself, don't let all of the dialogue become one big paragraph, separate the dialogues and make them each their own paragraph. Alos i like that you're going with the story and all but I feel like you're trying to get done with something before it needs to be done. Like dinner in chapter 10 you could have dragged that out, had alex get testy over something Jordan did to Madi.

But as with that there were a couple grammatical errors that i feel were just quick typing mistakes but over all this wasn't a bad story. Some places need more detail, or need to be longer, don't worry about how long a chapter is if it's long people will read it trust me.

Good luck with your future writing. you've got some good groundwork.
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I've honestly never read, nor have I listened to All Time Low. It was an interesting story. I wont lie, but it's not something I am really into. You are an amazing writer, but it was hard to keep myself reading. I don't really know why, but it wasn't something for me. But it was good. Keep on writing, love.

Alright my dear, coming at you from comment swap central, I do believe your story is rather lovely. I love the concept and I feel as though it has so much potential and it's actually really exciting to read.

But (always a but) I do believe you have some things you can work on. Being an All Time Low fanatic myself, I feel as though the band members kind of blend together. It seems as though you've developed one persona for everyone in the band. Normally when I think of Jack I think of extremely outgoing and a bit vulgar. Alex I see as the boy who is a step down from Jack's high seat (meaning he takes on some of the same traits but is more down to earth). Zack I believe you've developed well so far - I mean he is rather shy on camera. Rian I feel could be a bit more blunt than he is in your story.

I'm not going to touch on grammatical mistakes seeing as someone has previously mentioned it. Although I would like to point out that your story seems a bit rushed. I would've liked parts of the story to be dragged out more and beefed up with detail. But then again that's the way I write, not your style. I also noticed you used some lingo we don't use over here in the states, such a "boot". In the states we refer to a car's "boot" as the trunk. Just something to keep in mind when writing a story that takes place in another part of the world. :)

All in all I really do enjoy the story and concept. Keep it up! :)

You got a good thing going on here. :-) I like how you relate the chapters to the song titles. Your really good with description, your dialogues pretty cool. Your plot is really quite intresting. Overall a good read and a pretty sweet All Time Low fic. Can't wait for your next update :-) :-) :-) :-) :-) :-)