Sick Little Games. - Comments

I read the first three chapters and it's really cute so far. I love Harry Potter so I'm really glad comment swap took me here. I like that it's told in a mixture of letters and actual story. Though in the letters I felt the chat speak got kind of... distracting. I get that you did it because it's a letter though. The layout also made it a bit hard to words, maybe make the story area a different color so you can't see the words from the background.

Comment swap! I'm just starting, but I have points. 1) ALL TIME LOW. Haha. 2) I like the fact that you started it out as letters, because it gives a nice insight on the characters. 3) Careful - sometimes ya miss a line in formatting! And finally: 4) I really like the start. You pull the characters out a lot, which is cool, and it seems a bit different from the many HP fics (:

This story has me on the edge of my seat just from the title and the introduction, and the story gets major points for originality. I can't wait to read more. :)

This story has me on the edge of my seat just from the title and the introduction, and the story gets major points for originality. I can't wait to read more. :)

Comment Swap! :) All Time Low and Harry Potter... I like it! Haha, anyway, this story is nice. It's very original, the plotline is great. I like that it goes between letters and POV's, it's very unique. Anyway, I love this and I can't wait to see what happens next! Keep up the great work! :)

Hey, I really like this story it flows nice and there were no grammar or spelling issues that I saw. I do have to say that with the background it is really hard to read. It is still a really good story, keep up the good work:)

So I just started reading this, and the fact that it goes between letters and POV's is really original and unique. I've never really seen a story with that, but it drew me in and made me want to read more. And I also love how you brought HP characters into your story, and how they intertwine with the characters you came up with. Makes the story more interesting and even more fun to read. And even though I'm not a huge Harry Potter fan, this story is still fun to read. Keep the chapters coming! :)

Lol so I definitely saw the title of the story and was like "Oh, yay! All Time Low!" and then I clicked on it and was like "Oh, yay! Harry Potter" hahaha ANYWAYS! I really like that the chapters are written in letter form. It gives a real look into Sophie and Nixx"s relationship and it's al so really fun when you incorperate actual characters from the series. It just makes it more fun and relateable :)

OH! So she didn't get dumped he died....no wonder shes so sad!!!! And I want to smack Umbridge right in the face! But when I was reading it I flashed back towards the movie....sadly I haven't read the books...but it was funny! heheheh...yeah...

Wait hold the phone! They both like him? I think I'm right! eheheh I smell trouble! But you got to admit...later in the movies he does get pretty hot.... and LMBO! Well not everybody can do all of that in one day...I can't...and I'm with Just Keep Swimming on this one...i'm lazy too! But you probably did great!

Hahahaha well I wonder how Nixx is going to react to at little bit of info....good job guys! sorry its short im texting from phone..... :

Oh I like this! Keep it up! I think it's funny that your main character's name in Sophie because in my story Amortentia my main character is Sofia.

Hahaha so did something happen between Draco and Soph(?) or was that a flashback on some other guy? And omg doesn't Nixx like Draco? This was a good chapter! I liked it! she really is a lightweight...hahahahaha

Been busy, but went back and read the rest of the story. I love the plot. Although with the editors getting their powers back soon, you may want to fix your chapters up. For example;

Rick has a dog. The dog's name is Carl. "Come here, Carl!" Rick called out. Carl ran to him

when it should be;

Rick has a dog. The dog's name is Carl.

"Come here, Carl!" Rick called out.

Carl ran to him.

Just letting you know that you really need to fix it, because there are readers and editors on here that will report/suspend your story just for that purpose.

Came from comment swap. I read the two letters and just about died laughing. You girls are a hoot. I'll definitely been keeping an eye open for updates. This seems like a great story.

This comment is from my friend and I - we both enjoyed your story, but we've got a few questions. Why isn't there a clearer back story? Why doesn't Sophie like Blaise? Why does Sophie instantly cry when she gets called Phee? We understand that it reminds her of her ex, but what did he do so bad to make her cry just in the blink of an eye? We're hoping that these questions'll be answered in the near future, and that's all we wanted to know. Good job so far! xx

Comment swap brought me back again. Again, your story is very good and well written, I enjoyed it, and I'm not even a Harry Potter fan. I think you're a fantastic writer. I'd separate your paragraphs, it makes the chapters longer and more enjoyable. I like how everything is written in letter form, that makes it creative and original. So, good job. :)

Thank you comment swap for a Harry Potter fic that has some mention of a Malfoy :')
I've only read the first chapter to comment on for this though, so I can't say if everything applies to the whole story.
I'd say get some spacing in there, just to divide up the block of text into something that doesn't just look like a jumble of words. I do like the format of this though, how everything is written as a letter :) a very good tactic :')
I'm very intrigued as to how this will turn out so I'm going to read the rest of it now :'D
~Jack's Creativity

From comment swap. I've never liked Harry Potter, well never really got into it, but this story is really cool. The plot is interesting, I love your layout also. I couldn't find any spelling or grammar errors which was really nice considering a lot of the stories on here are full of them. I like your way of writing, your creativity is marvelous. Keep up the good work! :)

Thank God comment swap finally gave me a story about something I know! I absolutely love Harry Potter. I like how you change it up from the letters to it actually being from the character’s point of view, it helps make it more interesting. Not that the plot isn’t already interesting enough. Anyway, I wanted to get this comment out before I get immersed in the story and forget about it :)