I'm a fan from Sherlock Holmes.. the one and only!! I'm totaly in love for this!! You kept Holmes in the way he is, just like Watson, but you also brought part of a future time that we know and we are looking forward to. I'm speachless... keep up the great job!!
It's been a while and I totally forgot to write to you.. Sorry about that.. Hope you're well.. So another good chapter.. And I'm in lack of the creativity to write a descent comment.. Oh well maybe next time. Still loving this story.
First of all I LOOVE Sherlock Holmes( even though I secretly love Watson more) and this story is amazing- even the "filler" chapters :) It still has only 5 chapters, so I'm really intrigued to see how things will unfold from now on :)
Also love the layout :)) It's simple, and makes the story easier to read ;)
The title and the colors on the layout are bonuses, because they both help establish the tone of the story. I love your writing style; it's simple yet there's vivid imagery and you get a feel for the characters' personalities even in the prologue. Keep up the great work and best of luck with the story!
I really like your writing style, it is detailed but not overly detailed as many stories can get and I especially love the way you have written Holmes' dialogue and his deductions, I can really imagine him saying it. The idea for the story is interesting to me because I am not usually a huge fan of Sherlock Holmes fan fiction so this kind of story is new to me but I am glad I read it. Just a few typos though. In Chapter 1 it says 'you tied' instead of 'tried' and another one I spotted was 'if he he's in a gang that's after you than' in chapter 2 when it should say 'if he's in a gang that's after you then'. But other than those I haven't spotted any others. Keep up the good work. :D
So she has two jobs now? At least one of them is for certain and pays. I wonder how it will work out for her.. Hmmm.. This whole training thing with Holmes sounds.. Well.. Hard and probably chaotic. But somehow benefitting for Holmes himself. Hmm.. Good chapter.
She's going to become a detective, yay! I totally didn't see that one coming. It was nice to see a flash of her home life as well, and I feel really sorry for both Giselle and her little brother. I really hope Ed is okay! I also love the little scene you wrote with Holmes and Gselle, I thought that was written really well.
I have decided that I love your writing style. After reading most of your pirates fic 'ocean kiss' and this. I'm also glad you *cough* finally *cough* updated this again. I'm pretty sure I'm starting to love this story so yeah. I hope the heat isn't getting to you :p Now that I'm really getting into the story,I should probably give my freaking long comment now, while I remember what I wanted to write to you. I'm liking Giselle's character more and more, after your description I had an even easier time picturing her in my mind. So I can easier fall into the story so to speak... hmm.. yeah I can't remember what I wanted to say to this at the moment.. sorry xD good chapter and I'm looking forward to more
First things first; Sherlock fanfiction = MAJOR plus in your book, haha! I'm not the biggest fan of the layout, it's rather bland, but obviously, that doesn't matter as much as your writing does. I'd just suggest maybe making a custom layout, if you're able to.
"she had black hair, almost down to her waist, pretty face" - it almost sounds as if there were a few words missing from that sentence, like "and a" before pretty face. That was, however, the only grammatical error I could see in the first chapter, which I LOVED, by the way! The bullied genius line is used a few times in stories, but you've managed to use it to move your story forward, rather than having it as the main subplot, which is brilliant. The last two lines of the chapter, however, confuse me slightly. I'm not sure how she would know more if she had lost conciousness. Going on to read chapter two, I made a rather delightful discovery, and that was the way you write Sherlock and Wtson's dialogue. I don't know what it is about it, but I think it's really fabulous. I also love the concept that she's travelled back in time, such an original idea! Your writing is simply amazing, and I will most certainly be subscribing! :)