Dizzy Up the Girl - Comments

This is a fantastic story. The description, particularly in the first chapter, is really well done and you get to know the characters right from their first introduction. You clearly know what you're doing with your grammar and spelling which is refreshing these days. The layout is really simple and not distracting but it also reminds me of Niall because it's green!

Overall you are a talented writer. You're characterization is extremely well done and I love the bits of humor you've injected into it that make it a bit more lighthearted than just this heavy cancer tale. Keep up the good work!

Alright, I like the layout. I like how it's really simple and doesn't take much away from the story. The summary, though, I wasn't too fond of. I don't like how there's a little about the story, then dialouge, then more about the story. I just don't think that part flows right.

I really like how you started this story. You put some of it in the summary and I think it was a good sneak peak at what's to come.

What I really liked about the first chapter was the last sentence where Niall introduces himself. It kinda leaves the reader hanging and leaves them wanting more.

So far, I love this story! It's nice, easy to follow, the characterization is fantastic, and it's over all a well written story! :D

I like the idea of having the main character have cancer, which you have a firm understanding of (something not seen in most writers trying to act like they know what they're doing.) It's a very interesting topic to have, and I think a very "50/50" move which is always incredibly refreshing. Keep going, this story is fantastic!

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You are a great writer! You have a nice style and you have a great flow. One direction isn't my favorite boy band bu this story interested me. You took a risk by using a cancer patient as your main character but you handled it very well and I am impressed. You are really good and you should keep updating! You summary is really good and I barely saw any grammar errors throughout the chapters. I wish you the best of luck!

Hey I'm here because of Comment Swap I'm glad it sent me to your story! I think this is a really neat idea for a story, I really do hope you keep this up; I think it's a really good story so far! Well done! I’m going to recommend this story! The only set back is the layout, the white and green kinda messed with my eyes, but that's just me not everyone. I think it's a great story!

I really like the way you introduce your characters! It sets a great atmosphere for the story and really gives it just the right tone for one to be curious to see what happens next - i didn't notice that i was into chapter three, that's how interesting it was!

I actually really don't like One Direction but I like this story a lot. It's very well written and very interesting. I just wanted to keep reading. I'm defiantly going to recommend this! Keep writing! (my iPod is being stupid so here is my edit) I also really like the characters. I just might have to start liking One Direction though because I'm curious now xD

I actually really don't like One Direction but I like this story a lot. It's very well written and very interesting. I just wanted to keep reading. I'm defiantly going to recommend this! Keep writing!

I love the very last sentence of chapter four i literally laughed for 10 minutes straight. love this story!

I had no idea this was a One Direction fan fic; however, I like One Direction quite a bit, and I enjoy how you wrote Niall. I've only had time to read the first chapter, but I found little to no grammar or spelling mistakes, and your flow is quite lovely. Keep up the good work! I look forward to seeing more of this story. :)

This is really good! You described the character very well, but you need a bit more desciption of the hospital itself. and maybe her room.

Hiya! First off, I MUST say that I really loved your summary! Karma is such an eye-catching word - it makes you think about what has happened in the past - a fantastic opener! As for the rest of the story, I do feel that the story line is strong and well formed - you write Niall very well and you've made me really want to be friends with his character! Keep it up! xx