The premise of this seems solid, and very intriguing. I do enjoy the darker vibe the story is giving off. Despite the 2012 time stamp it definitely feels like it is set somewhere in, say, the 80's which is definitely that old school Ziggy Stardust touch to it. My only concern as a reader is that is feels a bit jumpy. There seems to be a small discord between some paragraphs which throws me off and I have to go back and read a line to catch myself up again. Also, I do feel like I'm missing something. In reading the existing comments I noticed that there is indeed a prequel. I feel like Kelly's character may need to be fleshed out a little more for readers who have just come in.
August 14th, 2016 at 01:53pm