Wanna Be Loved - Comments

I love how you have links to what the characters in your story look like! This is really well written and I also like how you have a song for the chapters. Great work, I can't wait to keep reading this!! :-)

@ TheInevitableTruth
Thank you so much! Let me know your thought as you keep reading! (:

I like this a lot already, and i will continue to read it soon(: xxx

apparently i posted it twice and i can't delete comments this is fucking stupid wow

the fact that it's brig makes this whole thing like 10,000 times better because i can totally picture her acting like this okay

@ sami needs an angel
Ahhh :D ily too bby! (:

@ oh but darling
Thank you (: the next chapter should be up soon!

i forgot about this story omfg ILY

It's really good (: I'm in LOVE with Delilah-- keep up the good work? xx

Good story can't wait for the next update.

I care!!! And it's was awesome! Update soon!!

@little ms dancer I will! (:
Currently writing! Thanks for the comment!

Hope you update soon! (:

Love this story :) can't wait for the next update

Awhhh. Update! Update!

loved it.

PAYZER IS NO MORE :'( </3

This story was not a bad read, if taken as an Original Story rather then a One Direction Fan-Fiction for those who are not a fan of them. Although I do enjoy that you broaden how you explain who is speaking or who is doing something, you repeat “petit girl”, “the brunette” ect too often. I love Delilah. She cracks me up in so many different parts. I’d consider reconstructing some sentences and paragraphs; tweaking them that slight bit can change the entire outlook on your style of writing. But, all in all, I did enjoy this.

While the story is fine, it's better to use names rather than "the petite girl" or "the brunette" or "the young girl." Once a character is described it should be assumed by the author that her readers know that the character is a petite young brunette. I've read so many books where I've been like "okay, I know she has sapphire eyes, you don't have to keep telling me every other page!" However, it does occur to me that since Delilah's a prostitute she may think of herself as "the girl" when not in pro mode, which actually would be a rather cool thing.

This is a good story, can't wait to see where it goes :)

ooooo jealous perrie?