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  • police911

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    I love how you have links to what the characters in your story look like! This is really well written and I also like how you have a song for the chapters. Great work, I can't wait to keep reading this!! :-)
    September 10th, 2014 at 12:20am
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    @ TheInevitableTruth
    Thank you so much! Let me know your thought as you keep reading! (:
    June 28th, 2013 at 06:06am
  • TheInevitableTruth

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    I like this a lot already, and i will continue to read it soon(: xxx
    June 24th, 2013 at 10:36pm
  • sami needs an angel

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    apparently i posted it twice and i can't delete comments this is fucking stupid wow
    June 11th, 2013 at 01:53am
  • sami needs an angel

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    the fact that it's brig makes this whole thing like 10,000 times better because i can totally picture her acting like this okay
    June 11th, 2013 at 01:53am
  • fading-and-falling

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    @ sami needs an angel
    Ahhh :D ily too bby! (:
    June 10th, 2013 at 06:02am
  • fading-and-falling

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    @ oh but darling
    Thank you (: the next chapter should be up soon! Very Happy
    June 10th, 2013 at 06:02am
  • sami needs an angel

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    i forgot about this story omfg ILY
    June 10th, 2013 at 05:26am
  • oh but darling

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    It's really good (: I'm in LOVE with Delilah-- keep up the good work? xx
    June 10th, 2013 at 02:12am
  • LynShiningStar

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    Good story can't wait for the next update.
    May 24th, 2013 at 02:40am
  • thelovelyreader

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    I care!!! And it's was awesome! Update soon!!
    May 23rd, 2013 at 06:30am
  • fading-and-falling

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    @little ms dancer I will! (:
    Currently writing! Thanks for the comment!
    October 13th, 2012 at 10:12am
  • Little Miss Dancer;

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    Hope you update soon! (:
    October 13th, 2012 at 10:11am
  • PS_itsbrooke

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    Love this story :) can't wait for the next update
    October 12th, 2012 at 01:05am
  • llayynaa159

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    Awhhh. Update! Update!
    October 10th, 2012 at 07:23am
  • danimurphy27

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    loved it.

    PAYZER IS NO MORE :'( </3
    October 1st, 2012 at 12:42am
  • foREVer_Synyster

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    This story was not a bad read, if taken as an Original Story rather then a One Direction Fan-Fiction for those who are not a fan of them. Although I do enjoy that you broaden how you explain who is speaking or who is doing something, you repeat “petit girl”, “the brunette” ect too often. I love Delilah. She cracks me up in so many different parts. I’d consider reconstructing some sentences and paragraphs; tweaking them that slight bit can change the entire outlook on your style of writing. But, all in all, I did enjoy this.
    September 14th, 2012 at 08:40pm
  • Marisyana

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    While the story is fine, it's better to use names rather than "the petite girl" or "the brunette" or "the young girl." Once a character is described it should be assumed by the author that her readers know that the character is a petite young brunette. I've read so many books where I've been like "okay, I know she has sapphire eyes, you don't have to keep telling me every other page!" However, it does occur to me that since Delilah's a prostitute she may think of herself as "the girl" when not in pro mode, which actually would be a rather cool thing.
    September 8th, 2012 at 08:21pm
  • darlingdoll

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    This is a good story, can't wait to see where it goes :)
    September 6th, 2012 at 10:08am
  • danimurphy27

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    ooooo jealous perrie?
    August 5th, 2012 at 11:56pm
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