Troubled Youth - Comments

One of the best stories I've ever read. I definitely prefer the happy ending though. The sad one just made me feel sad.

I 've read the both ending. I do like better the sad one. It's more a real life thing instead of a fairy tell one ;)

amazing work on this story though

Best story ever. But I hate Ella!!! I wanted to destroy her lol

I think this is the perfect ending. It's sad, but the way Jared met his daughter was bittersweet because he got a little part of Ella back. He won't be fully happy, but now he can move forward with his daughter and build a relationship with her. It's sad that Ella died of cancer and for some reason I thought she would die in a car crash or something haha Anyways I can't wait to see what you come up with next :D

Oh sweet Jesus, Ella! Why Ella! She has been tugging me this way and that way, it's just so confusing to me and her running away. Man I feel like she won't ever stop. If she needs to be away from someone in order to clear her mind she seriously need to think of something else to do because no friend or boyfriend would want Ella to keep walking out on them. i can't wait for the epilogue though and see if things really changed or not. I am clearly set on having Ella and Jared not being together because that is just one hell of a ride hat they were and and if I was Jared I would be really cautious of her. I wouldn't want my friend or girlfriend to keep walking out on me when she 'needs space' and then come back as if everything is right in the world and more accepting into whatever she had troubled with earlier. They shouldn't be together in my opinion. It's just too much.

O-M-G. Ella actually felt something! I know she has feelings but she hides them pretty often and if I were Jared I would just be so sick of waiting for her. Ella just teases Jared whenever they are close to one another and that small glimmer of hope is dashed when she pulls away when her previous actions say something else. I kind of lost remorse for Ella simply because she jus keeps running and finds that comfort with Jared. She already confessed she has feelings for him but I feel sometimes when someone finally comes around it's a little too late. That can be one of those incidents. Iwouldn't mind if they didn't end up with one another. This is a great story over with major issues and for Ella to call Jared a boy. I found that ironic since Ella has been acting like a child since day one with running away from her emotions and taking a risk. I'm not saying Jared is right either for staying but at least he knows what he wants.

Don't do it Jared. As much as I like Ella they are just better off the way they are. It's just too much drama and even if they are going to he happy with one another they won't be for long. I'm certain that they might do the opposite of what I was talking about haha.
Sorry it took so long for me to read it I had a lot of things going on

We are inching closer to the end! I was just waiting for Ella to say those magical words 'i'm getting a divorce' Typical Ella running away from every single problem that she has and finds someone to refuge with and if that refuge is the source of her problems she finds another one. Seems like she does it...too much for her own good. Honestly I don't have not a lot of questions or any questions for Ella. Maybe why she runs away constantly from all her problems because there is no such thing, the problem always follows you and if she ever regretted having this up and down relationship with Jared at all. That is all i can come up with.

That's a toughie. From what Jared is doing without Ella I think he probably would go back to her if she was more than willing. He doesn't care all that much for Adrian and if ella wants to leave Adrian for him I doubt he will tell her to fix her marriage. I shocked that soliel is going to turn 3 that fast huh? Poor Jared has all these problems and moving on seems to be the hardest. I find it unfair how Ella has happiness but not Jared. Nonetheless he refuses to move on so he can be to blame in his unhappiness. I hope things out for the best whether it's them bring together or not

In a way I'm kind of like Jared she pisses me off but I love her despite her ways XD damn Ella and her mysteriousness! Lol

Those are some emotions that was really crazy to read. I know it's easier to portray her feelings since she's hormonal and easily got attached to her daughter. I thought it was adorable that Jared felt uncomfortable in his akin when he gained all that weight for chapter 27. It was refreshing to see that he isn't always so confident about his body. I also found Ella a bit annoying in this chapter maybe because she was so sure of giving her daughter away and now that she is more vocal about what she is thinking with Jared...ales me feel bad for him because he wanted soliel and he had to reassure her they did the right thing. I know they love each other and people have doubts like Ella but damn she sure is draining. Every chapter so far I lways shook my head at her antics and this one was no different don't get me wrong I love the story but being as far as it is I look back and think Damn Ella is sort of a bitch. She only now cares about Jared or expresses it more after all this time. Kudos to Jared for sticking bu her because millions of people would have just ended the friendship or whatever. I give him so much more praise since he's the stronger one not ella. Jared is fearless when it comes to expressing himself while Ella is more withdraw and detached. Regardless of what Ella had done she is one of my favorite characters on this site lol.

I didn't expect that...

For some reason pregnancy hasn't crossed my mind even though they were having sex like jack rabbits and probably didn't use protection some of those random sex escapades. I was so sad though that they gave up Soliel or are going to give her up in the next chapter. Them surviving as a couple was close to impossible with that problem conflicting them the whole way. I feel bad for both of them, I know that Ella let her fear get a good grip on her conscious and let her settle for adoption. No matter how strong she is, Ella is probably going to cry or become depressed, it will impact her greatly to give up her baby girl. It was a part of her for nine to ten months and now she was giving up the creation she made with Jared. How sad is that? Also Soliel, what if she finds out who her parents are? She probably thinks that they didn't want her and even if her parents told her that her biological parents did love her, but wasn't ready for kids or something along those lines, it would still hurt her. Will Soliel make an appearance in later chapters? I don't want to jump to conclusions, but maybe they will see each other again? Great chapter and thank you for updating earlier than your Tumblr group. Since I am the only one who is commenting, I am the voice of your readers apparently haha

Wow that chapter had a lot to take in. So many things were going on and I had to reread a few things because it was such a long chapter XD great nonetheless and even though I remember us discussing about how heartless Ella is, it still blew me away how bitchy she turned out haha. I know she isn't an emotional creature, well she doesn't show it as freely as Jared is and he does sound like a girl most of the time lol that's why I love Jared is that he isn't so hard headed when it comes to his emotions, he pretty much shares how he feels unlike Ella. It was nice that she actually shared information like that and I was surprised that she was pregnant, I know that usually girls who have sex a lot end up getting pregnant. The thing that shocked me was that her mother kicked her out when she aborted the child, that's something new. I usually read or hear about mothers kicking their daughter out for just getting pregnant.
Ella put her mother through hell I must say and that was probably the last straw, to get through to Ella was by kicking her out and seeing that she wasn't changing made her bitter towards her own daughter.
Finally they are together officially after years of being in each other's lives haha Jared is a cheesy person, spreading jokes and grinning like a mad man. Let's hope that this actually works out...

So sorry that I was delayed, school started for me so yeah.
Tension thicker than bricks my man. I can't believe that Ella was being so harsh with Jared and holding a grudge against him. I have no idea that she would be so sentimental, but then again a year without Jared might have done her some good. She has clearly softened up a bit and the whole Africa trip, I can feel a bit of something coming on, a storm, could be good could be bad. Idk, but it sounds like it's going to be a great story line. Jealous Jared is so amusing to me for some reason and the whole flirting is back on I see. I am at the edge of my seat or bed waiting for what is going to happen in Africa.
Hope you have a great first day back in school. :)

I was a little confused when you brought Sky in, but I understand a little bit more now. The Chronicles of Jared's Conflicted Feelings continues. I understand why Cameron would feel threatened about Ella and Jared's strange relationship, they had history together and Ella is being more open about her feelings which is bad for Cameron. It was so sad when Ella's father died and her mother can suck it. Her mother is freaking rich and she tried to rake all the money her father saved for her to herself, selfish as hell.

Glad to see that you updated and hope that your moving in days are smooth. I start school Monday so yipee, you can sense my excitement.

Now there is a twist that I kind of expected. Ella spilling her life story to the one person that she isn't really close to. It's easier when you find that someone who you can really just spill your guts to without feeling no sense of judgement from that person. Cameron is really a sweet woman and seeing that she isn't jealous adds to it. So glad you didn't make her some bitch or the evil character that gets in the way of Jared. Nice add to have Ella still be the constant shield that renders Jared and Ella to be finally happy with one another. It did make me sad that Jared still after all this time was still trying to make sure that he wasn't going to make a mistake with Cameron as he asked Ella if there was something between them. Ugh, sure he is happy, but he isn't fully happy like I would have hoped XD

I get that Ella has that mysterious air about her and he wants to learn more about the girl since he has been around her for so long. I seriously think they think a break form one another because Jared is moving on with Cameron and Ella can't constantly be around an engaged couple without some part of her hurting. Great chapter, love. Can't wait for more.

Wow just...wow. Shannon does prove a point and seeing Jared spill his guts out. I felt like saying 'wrong move bro!' as sappy as his speech was I knew Ella completely shut down when he started to get real with her. So sad to see that she was brushing off what he had to say. Can't wait to see Cameron falls into this :)
So is Ella finally moving out then? It's for the best seeing that Jared keeps on getting hurt in the long run

You were right. I am more frustrated with Ella, she is like a robot in a way where she keeps everything so close to her. Ella is in some thousand foot castle with a moat covered with alligators and around the moat is an electric fence and before that aggressive attack dogs. She is just one hot mess.

As for Jared. Dear Lord what have he done to himself?! He has gone off the deep end, getting himself hurt in the process, he shouldn't have let her words touch his heart so much. Every word he wished it was real, but we all know that he is convinced that she really means it. For some reason, I don't think Ella loves Jared the way he loves her. She respects him in a way, not fully since she is treating him like some old rag doll that she can play with and once she's tired of it, she tosses it and leaves it until she is ready to play with it again. Jared, oh Jared what are we going to do with you? He should listen to Shannon's advice and just flat out telling the truth, the truth shall set him free. Well, might send Ella packing, but at least he wouldn't be lying to himself anyone. Everyone has their limits and I can clearly see that Jared is about to crack. Would be wicked if he exploded! :D

Why am I just so frustrated with Ella? Maybe it's because I know she is going to hurt Jared in the long run. I just want to scream at him, watch out! But that wouldn't work since this story is fictional haha. I can't believe she would joke about something like marriage, ugh another thing that would plague little J's head when she isn't around. I mean she keeps popping these ideas in his head and he is going to go mental! Also, the no reaction to the three words mean something Jared. I could mean two things, she doesn't feel the same or tries to push away the feelings she has already. Moving in together, getting a house and doing all of these things together are just a huge mistake on Jared's part. He's becoming way too attached and trying to have her more into his life, sounds like he is more conflicted than happy when he is around Ella. He is always trying to figure her out instead of thinking happy thoughts. Ella is kind of a downer haha update soon!

Okay, I have been off mibba for faaaaarrrrrrrrr to long! I just read the first chapter, is this the beginning of what I think it is?
Either way it's boss.