September 17th, 2012 at 03:58am
Comment swap!
Alright so there's a few things I wanna say.
One; i'm a fan of the plot you have going, but the sentences don't really flow. But on the bright side i don't think i saw any grammar or spelling errors.
Two; the layout is distracting, that can be a turn off for allot of reader. (i know some that wont read stories because of it.)
Three: I would be careful about the links in the first chapter because it goes against Mibba's guide lines, and that can cause a couple of problems for you.
all this is honesty and i'm going to subscribe.
I really enjoy the plot of this story, and feel as though you know where you want to go with it. However, the layout was really distracting for me, and I had to use the default layout. You have great grammar, and spelling, but sometimes the sentences didn’t flow that easily for me. Keep it up though, girl. I can tell you’re going to be an amazing writer :) x